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Several years ago, I wrote an article on how to write different types of magic uses, or rather how I personally write various types of magic users within the context of my Quaraun books. Today that page is one of my top ten most visited articles. It gets 50 to 500 views/reads/hits/visits per day depending on the time of the years and has had over 200k visits total since it was published.

Amphibious Aliens: Debunking The Atwater Family's Alien Abduction Hoax with more then 30MILLION reads since 2007 and The GoldenEagle: Debunking Stephen King's World's Most Haunted Car Hoax with over tenMILLION reads since 2007 still rank as the two most visited articles on my website, but, neither of those are writing related.

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Pronouns For Fantasy Authors and How I Use Them: Just Lots of Talk About How I Use Pronouns

If you have followed my website for any length of time, you are by now aware that I like using Reddit to get my article ideas. I search reddit for questions and then I answer them, here, though not often on Reddit. While I post answers here on my website daily, often 3 or more a day, I only post answers on Reddit once, maybe twice, a week, if that often. I dislike the toxic vibes of Reddit comment sections and so avoid dealing with them, by writing up very long comments and then NOT posting the comment on Reddit, but rather instead posting it here for you. my readers, because I know you guys are not toxic. And so, that is what this page is, yet again, today. I have found a question on reddit and I am going to answer it here instead of answering it o Reddit. Enjoy!



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Pronouns For Fantasy Authors and How I Use Them: Just Lots of Talk About How I Use Pronouns

Today (October 6, 2023), let's do something a little bit different. Starting last week of July 2023, I have been testing out ChatGPT on my website. Today, let's see what ChatGPT has to say about this Reddit post.

I'm going to start out by answering the post myself, and then afterwards, I am going to paste the question into ChatGPT and see how similar or different AI's answer is from mine.

Note: these are posts I have written on Reddit throughout 2021, 2022, and 2023, compiled from my Reddit account, and the original posts are linked to so you can read all the other users' comments as well.

But why am I doing it today?

Well, over on Twitter, I saw a question that reminded m I had this backlog of Reddit posts that I had not uploaded here for you guys yet. So, let's start with the Twitter post first.

Pronouns For Fantasy Authors and How I Use Them: Just Lots of Talk About How I Use Pronouns


My answer to  when writing a scene with only two people, 1 male & 1 female. once you establish their identity, do you ever refer to them by their name or only by he/she, since the reader knows who they are? Or use their name just to mix it up?





>>>when writing a scene with only two people, 1 male & 1 female. once you establish their identity, do you ever refer to them by their name or only by he/she, since the reader knows who they are? Or use their name just to mix it up?


>>>when writing a scene with only two people, 1 male & 1 female. once you establish their identity, do you ever refer to them by their name or only by he/she, since the reader knows who they are? Or use their name just to mix it up?

I don't think about it in the 1st draft, so it ends up a mix bag. In editing, I make sure every 5th personal pronoun is a proper name. So if it had been Tom, Beth, he, her, she, him, he, she, he, she, his, her's, he, she. I change it to: Tom, Beth, he, her, she, him, Tom, she, he, she, his, Beth's, he, she. And so on. I don't know why, I just have always done it that way.

My answer to  Names, tags, and pronouns. I use more tags ("the red-headed sleuth," "the one-eyed man," "the handsome Latina") when it's two characters with the same pronouns, but I use a mix at all times





>>>Names, tags, and pronouns. I use more tags ("the red-headed sleuth," "the one-eyed man," "the handsome Latina") when it's two characters with the same pronouns, but I use a mix at all times


>>>Names, tags, and pronouns. I use more tags ("the red-headed sleuth," "the one-eyed man," "the handsome Latina") when it's two characters with the same pronouns, but I use a mix at all times

Yeah, I do this too. My mc gets called "the blue eyed Elf" way more then he gets called by either his name or pronoun, lol! Probably too much. I think I use epitaphs way more than I should.


My answer to  When to use "he"?
Advice
I am writing a story in 3rd person omniscient viewpoint. When do I repeat the characters name when he is thinking or performing an action and when can I just use he?





>>>When to use "he"?

Advice

I am writing a story in 3rd person omniscient viewpoint. When do I repeat the characters name when he is thinking or performing an action and when can I just use he?


>>>When to use "he"? Advice I am writing a story in 3rd person omniscient viewpoint. When do I repeat the characters name when he is thinking or performing an action and when can I just use he?

It depends.

Like it depends on:

  • * The tone of the story:

Is it fast paced, moving quickly, heart pounding, monster chasing, need to move for speed? Or is it an elderly couple slowly meandering along, chatting while watching the sun set, and just enjoying the view?

  • * The flow/pacing:

Do I want the reader to slow down and look around the scene noticing clues that'll be important to the plot later on? Vs do I want the reader to be so immersed in the scene that they flow through it quickly like melted butter?

  • * The narrator:

If 1st person, how does the character refer to themselves? If 3rd person is it the character who is the narrator (if so how do they call themselves?) or is it a "bird on the shoulder" type of narrator (if so, how do they refer to the character?)?

  • * The setting/atmosphere:

Is it in a boat on a nice, warm, safe, sunny day on the lake? Or is it on a ghost ship that just rose up out of the sea during a deadly, dark, and stormy hurricane?

All of these things are going to play are part in what exactly I decide to do, so it's going to change on a scene by scene, story by story basis. I'm not an author who lays down one "rule" and then mass forces every story to rigidly adhere to it. I do what is best for each scene within each story, and I may end up doing many different methods even in a single story.

But, I am a creature of habit and I do tend to fall back on the same things again and again.

Also, I'm someone who puts a big, heavy focus on character emotions, inner monologues, and the setting/atmosphere/tone of the scene, so I change what I do based on how these things change as well.

However, as a base general rule, I have a starting point, where I start from and then change from there, depending on what the scene in question needs.

Now, keep in mind this is just a thing I do in my own stories and it may or may not be a good fit for yours. It's not an actual grammar rule, but rather a thing I found that personally helps me out.

I have a personal "rule" that I gave myself (it's not an actual grammar rule, just a rule I made up for myself, in order to not have pronoun confusion in my own works) to never repeat he/she/they/etc pronouns more then 5 times in a row, and replace 1 in every 5 with the character's name, placing it where it reads/sounds best when read, and to add descriptors in places where 2 characters of the same gender might be confused with one another if too many pronouns are too close together.

Also, in my 1st drafts, I’m prone to a heavy overuse of “was” and “as”, which I edit out in my 2nd drafts, via rewording the sentences to be more active, less verbose, and more fluid. And I see that your example here has that same issue, which in and over itself, can lead to an overuse of “it”, and I think it why “it” is getting over used so much in your instance.

But also don't just replace the pronouns with descriptors like "the blonde girl", "the brown eyed officer", etc. Because those don't always fit and could confuse the reader. Use descriptors, yes, but don't just replace them at random. Use them only when it is logical to do so. Read it out loud to make sure they don't interrupt pacing, flow, or logic.

With that rule in mind, I personally, would change something like this:

  • Jim is a male cop. Jim (The cop) went on patrol. He responded to a call. After the call, he went to lunch. Jim (The cop) finished his shift without incident and went home.

...to this:

  • * James T. Brody was a rookie patrol officer of The Old Orchard Beach Police Department, hired on for summer beach duty. After responding to a minor call with a tourist being bitten by a seagull, he went to lunch. Jim bought a jumbo slice of pizza from Bill's and poured vinegar on his Pier Fries, then sat on the edge of the town square water fountain to watch the amusement rides of Palace Playland. After his lunch break, Officer Brody finished the remainder of his shift without incident. It had been a long dull, boring day. He was glad to be home for the night.

You could add additional details like this:

  • * James T. Brody was a blue eyed, bleach blond, rookie patrol officer of The Old Orchard Beach Police Department, hired on for summer beach duty. After responding to a minor call with a tourist being bitten by a seagull, he went to lunch. Jim bought a jumbo slice of pizza from Bill's and poured vinegar on his Pier Fries, then sat on the edge of the town square water fountain to watch the amusement rides of Palace Playland. His dark blue uniform contrasted starkly with the dark red brick sidewalks. After his lunch break, Officer Brody finished the remainder of his shift without incident. It had been a long, dull, boring day. He was glad to be home for the night.

...which now tells us more details about what he looks like (blue eyes, bleach blond, wearing a blue uniform) but don't get carried away with it and add so many details that it becomes clunky and jarring to read. You want to add enough flavour that the reader can visualize your character, but not so much detail that it becomes a dull, dry, boring info dump.

I don't think there is anything wrong with sprinkling in descriptors, as long as you read it out loud so you can hear if it flows smoothly, and do it in a way that adds to the scene, rather than breaking the reader out of immersion.

Now, let's count the pronouns, so you can see my "rule of 5" in action:

  • * '*James T. Brody*'(1) was a '*rookie patrol officer*'(2) of The Old Orchard Beach Police Department, hired on for summer beach duty. After responding to a minor call with a tourist being bitten by a seagull, '*he*'(3) went to lunch. '*Jim*'(4) bought a jumbo slice of pizza from Bill's and poured vinegar on '*his*'(5) Pier Fries, then sat on the edge of the town square water fountain to watch the amusement rides of Palace Playland. After '*his*'(6) lunch break, '*Officer Brody*'(7) finished the remainder of '*his*'(8) shift without incident. It had been a long dull, boring day. '*He*'(9) was glad to be home for the night.

This section contains 9 nouns for one character, and I mixed them up in a logical/clarity order, that allows for none to be repeated more then 3 times within a 5 noun sequence.

  • * This: James T. Brody(1), rookie patrol officer(2), he(3), Jim(4), his(5), his(6), Officer Brody(7), his(8), He(9)

It combines variety with clarity, in a way that does not distract from the scene or confuse the reader.

It's not repetitious, while also not posing confusion for who is being referred to. It also alerts the reader to both his full name (James T. Brody) and his nickname (Jim) and his title (Officer Brody) so that the reader knows from now on, these 3 pronouns are the same man.

Notice when I introed him I used his full name, including "James" instead of his nickname "Jim", but when he was off-duty I used the less formal "Jim" and then, when he went back on duty I switched to more formal "Officer Brody".

Notice I changed the word cop to police officer and specified a location. This is because, my dad was an officer back in the 1960s and I grew up around a lot of police officers, was friends of many "cop" families most of my life, and growing up I saw a stark difference in the attitudes of people who said "cop" from the people who said "officer".

  • * I my personal experience - 99% of the time, if someone said "cop" they were prone to have a chip on their shoulder against their local police, be highly instigative, they were often spouting off anti government conspiracies alongside weird alien abduction stories-bigfoot/cryptid sightings/UFO sightings, they had a severe lack of disrespect for authority in general, and overall hold a general belief that "cops" were "out to get them".

And also:

  • * I my personal experience - 99% of the time, if someone said "officer" they were prone to not be breaking the law even on minor levels (no drinking, no drugs, no speeding tickets, no jaywalking, etc)., they had a higher than average education (usually a Master's degree or higher), had a professional level career (the type requiring wearing a suit or uniform, such as doctors, lawyers, postal/mail carriers, firemen, etc.), they were less prone to violent outbursts, they were more prone to talk calmly and rationally, they were not spouting off conspiracy theories about cops/aliens/bigfoot/etc.

Due to this, whenever I see the word "cop" in narration, I immediately assume the narrator is an unreliable narrator who can not be trusted to tell the truth because they wouldn't be using the term "cop" if they were a trustworthy, not paranoid, conspiracy theorist.

Likewise when I see the word "officer" in narration, I am more prone to trust that the narrator is intelligent, is not some creepazoid UFO-crazy nut job, and is someone who has respect for authority.

I have a deep dislike for UFO-crazies (I am "EelKat Etiole's Friend"-google me if you are not a UFO crazy-if you are a UFO crazy, rest assured I will find out soon enough and block you everywhere. I want the nut jobs to leave my husband alone, to stop calling him an alien, to stop showing up in my yard looking for EBEs-I'm fucking sick of conspiracy theorists in my yard, chasing after Etiole.)... I have a deep dislike for UFO-crazies and line my yard with steel jaw bear traps to keep them out, soooo... I absolutely refuse to use the word "cop" unless the character/narrator is a dipshit UFO-crazy. Thus why I changed it to "officer".

Side tangent rant, yes, I know, but I say this to show you how my brain thinks, and how my personal life experiences fall into play, to change the types of pronouns I use in my stories.



I'm NOT saying you should change out cop vs officer the way I do, rather I am pointing out that my personal life experience heavily influences which pronouns I choose to use and why I choose to use them. And that this is going to be different for every author, based on your own personal life experiences and how they influence which types of words you use to describe your characters.

So, my personal experience with knowing a lot of police officers, and knowing that they usually ask to be addressed by "Title + Last Name" (Sergeant Brody, Deputy Brody, Officer Brody, Detective Brody, Chief Brody, Deputy Chief Brody, Assistant Director Brody, and so on... there are well over a dozen different titles, and in big cities, some officers prefer "Title + Last Name + Badge Number". Titles are like military ranks too, so, if you are getting into a full story about an officer, you definitely want to research the ranking orders to get it right, because any one who is or knows a police officer is going to notice that error, really fast.

There is nothing wrong with "overuse" of the character's name and gender pronouns. It's actually worse if you don't use the character's name in every paragraph, because then the reader risks forgetting which character the scene is happening to, causing them to flip back a page and ask: "Which character is this again?"



Now there is nothing wrong with it only being "he" BUT the character has become a faceless nobody. Stripping them of their name removes them from being an important character in the story and regulates them to being a minor side character, not important enough to be given a name. Without a name, the reader doesn't give a shit about him and skims faster in his scenes, because they want to get on with the story of the main characters who do have names.

You want the reader to keep seeing the faces of the characters as they read, and doing that requires using the character's name often and frequently.

If you use the name once and then go 10 pages with only using "he" the reader doesn't form a clear visual image of the character in their mind and the character becomes a forgettable faceless nobody.

You don't want readers forgetting who your characters are, so you want to err on the side of overusing the name rather than underusing it and overusing pronouns instead.

Remember you the author always have a clear image of who is who in your head, because you are writing the story, but the reader does not. You need to think of it in terms of how do you make sure the reader never forgets who your characters are and write accordingly.

There is no actual grammar rule about how often to use pronouns vs names, but I found the rule of 5 works well for me, the types of stories I write, and the types of readers my stories attract.

The rule of 5 might work for you as well, or, you might find the mood you are going for needs fewer uses of names and more uses of pronouns or vice versa.

As you get a few dozen stories finished and edited and a few published, you'll start to gain a feel for what works for you, and adjust to that.

It really is a thing that just comes with practice and writing lots of words.

As they say, you aren't proficient in writing until after you've written a million words, and everything before those first million words is just going to be unpublishable practice.

I wonder how many on this sub have done their one million practice words before they set out to write something publishable?

Are you aware that I average writing 3,650,000 words each and every year?

And I publish an average of 1,400,000 words a year.

I write a 10k word short story every single day. I publish 1 to 3 of those 10k word stories every week.

And that doesn't include things like these huge Reddit posts I also write.

I write more than 17k words a day.

I write more than 4 million words a year.

I publish just under 2 million words a year.

If you want to know how to get better at writing, the answer really is to just write a lot, keep writing a lot, write a whole bunch more, and, you'll figure it out just from that practice alone.

Combine that with daily reading professionally published paperback novels and on topic nonfiction, and you'll get better faster.

And onto pictures nonfiction, I don't mean writing books. I mean if your main character is a silk weaver, then read every book you can find on the history of silk weaving, read craft books on how to weave silk, buy some silk threads and silk cloth to touch how it feels and smell how it smells. Visit a silk weaver to ask them questions and touch their looms and feed their silkmoths, and prune their mulberry for yourself. On topic nonfiction reading does wonders for making you a better fiction writer as does hands on research of actually tasting, smelling, and touching the real items.

Write a lot, read a lot, and get off the internet, go outside, and interview real people in your town. That's what is going to help you figure out best how to write.

And yes, this helps with pronoun overuse as well.

How?

Before visiting the local silk weaver, you had a mental image of a faceless nobody, so you wrote, he, he, he, he, he, and left the reader asking who is he?

After visiting the local silk weaver and talking to him face to face, spending the day in his workshop, walking through his mulberry groves, seeing the process of how he takes moths to cloth, now you have a name and a face and a voice in your head, and now he becomes real to you the author because you talking to a real person offline in real life and that experience shines through in your writing as you use names more often because you yourself are no longer thinking of a faceless he, but rather now see the face of the man you met.

Try it and you'll see. Offline, actual first hand research, is going to change how often you use names vs pronouns, because you'll start thinking of your characters as people instead of characters.


As I said above, I personally try to never repeat he/she/they/etc pronouns more then 5 times in a row, and replace 1 in every 5 with the character's name, placing it where it reads/sounds best when read.

So, something like this:

  • * Jim(1), he(2), he(3), his(4), Officer Brody(5),

The character is mentioned 5 times, the first and fifth mention are her name, the three mentions in between are gender pronouns. But I don't stick with that so rigorously that it causes confusion.

As you saw in practice in the example above, this:

  • * James T. Brody(1), rookie patrol officer(2), he(3), Jim(4), his(5), his(6), Officer Brody(7), his(8), He(9)

... does not EXACTLY follow the 5 times in a row, and replaces 1 in every 5 with the character's name, because doing so would have made the section confusing to read. But it follows it close enough that the rule still applies and is used with minor adjustments.

Remember: always opt for clarity first and foremost. You don't want to leave your reader confused, and you don't want to break them out of immersion. You want variety to fit naturally and flow smoothly without being clunky or jarring, so always read what you wrote out loud to make sure it's not jarring to read.

Also, every time I start a new paragraph, I make sure the first mention of the character is always their name, that way their name is at least once in every paragraph they appear in.

Likewise with dialogue, I use a 300 word rule of making sure the character's name is in the dialogue tags at a rate of about every 300 words.

I frequently write my 1st drafts with no dialogue tags at all, just because my brain is thinking the story faster than my fingers are typing it so I tend to skip typing anything I can remember to add during editing.

When I'm working on the second draft, I copy 300 words to a time into ProWritingAid. There, no matter where in the story it is, if there is any dialogue, I add tags to the first 2 lines. Usually said/replied or asked/answered.

"Blah blah," Sam said.

"Blah blah," Pip replied.

And that's it.

The rest of the dialogue in that 300 word section has no tags.

When I have finished editing that 300 word section, I paste it back into the draft. Then I copy the next 300 word section and repeat.

The end result is if a 900 word dialogue appears in the story, it has 3 sets of 2 dialogue tags, 6 dialogue tags total.

I edit the entire draft in this way.

My reason?

A paperback book has 250 to 350 words per page depending on font size. By editing in the way I do, it results in every page of dialogue always including tags somewhere on the page, ensuring the reader knows who is talking no matter which page they are reading.

I don't know if any other author does anything like this or not, it's just an editing habit I developed for myself over the years, because it worked out to make my dialogue easier for readers to follow.

But, also, not just with dialogue. When editing my drafts, I highlight every 300 words of text, read that 300 word section, and if a character is there, I make sure to add his name into that 300 word section.

I make certain that the name of the character appears AT LEAST ONCE on every page that character is on, that way my readers never have to flip pages back to remember which "he" this character is. The name is on every page.

As an example of what I mean, let’s say your girl on the stairs is named Jenny. Here’s how I would take one badly written sentence of Jenny on the stairs, and change it into a much better scene:

With that rule in mind, I personally, would change something like this:

  • >>>Jenny reaches the central staircase. She knows there is no time to stop, but she needs to catch her breath. So, against her better judgement, the blonde girl stops.

...to this:

  • * Jenny reaches the central staircase. Jenny knows there is no time to stop, but she needs to catch her breath. So, against her better judgement, Jenny stops.

Now, I would use action and things like blonde/etc descriptors as well, like this to bring the scene to life even more:

  • * Jenny reached the central staircase. Jenny knew there is no time to stop, but she needed to catch her breath. So, against her better judgement, Jenny stopped. Nervously Jenny twirled her blonde hair tightly around her finger, as she took several long, deep, slow breaths. Her green eyes darted side to side, glancing around the room. Perhaps there was a place to hide. She was so out of breath, Jenny was uncertain if she could run much longer. Why hadn't she kept up with her weight loss program? Or her gym membership? Or at least cut back on soda and try to eat healthier? Jenny spied a loose ribbon hanging from the nearby curtain and hastily yanked it off, and used it to tie her long blonde hair back into a ponytail. At least she could keep her hair out of her eyes while she was running.

Something like this, still tells the reader that she is blonde, also reveals both eye colour and the fact that she is a bit overweight and out of shape. It adds to the fact that she's not used to running and is struggling to breath, and it mixes up descriptors, name, and gender pronouns in such a way as to not be as repetitive, while not being as heavy handed and clunky.

I don't think there is anything wrong with sprinkling in descriptors, as long as you read it out loud so you can hear if it flows smoothly, and do it in a way that adds to the scene, rather than breaking the reader out of immersion.

So, can you see how one 1st draft poor scene, evolved in 2nd and 3rd draft edits to improve? And I’m sure if I was to take time to edit it a few more times I could continue to make it even better, but, this is just a quick sample written for a Reddit post so I’m not putting a lot of effort into it, rather just showing how a few quick changes in a couple of minutes, can improve writing.

In your personal example, your over use of “it” is coupled with an over use of passive (not active) verbs and phrases (“was” verbs and “as” phrases, for example). If you remove almost every instance of “was” replacing it with an -ed verb instead, and rewrite it so “as” phrases are changed into active descriptors, then make sure that at least 1 in ever 5 pronouns is a proper name-like this: Jenny(1), she(2), her(3), (she(4), Jenny(5)-you will improve flow, remove the chunkiness, and end the overuse of it/he/she/they all at once.

Now, applying what I did to the example above, to your exact example here, I would take this:

>>>It was a challenge for her to drag her suitcase down the stairs.
>>
>>>Half way through she missed a step and watched her suitcase fall down the stairs crashing against the hall cabinet by the front door.
>>
>>>The picture frame on top of it collapsed and slid down onto the floor.
>>
>>>Her feet barely touched the steps below her as she mainly held onto the railing before jumping down and sitting on her knees and examined the frame.
>>
>>>To her amazement it was still in tact but rather dusty. Though her home is hardly that due to her obsession with keeping everything neat and tidy.
>>
>>>The dust slid off easily as she blew on it.
>>
>>>She smiled looking at it, it was a photo of her and her twin brother taken over a decade ago. His goofy little face and innocent smile. They were nothing alike but always looked out for each other.
>>
>>>They made a bond for life and it broke unexpectedly. It wasn’t her doing and neither was it anyone else’s.
>>
>>>Her lips trembled as she pressed them together trying to hold back tears.
>>
>>>The clock chimed as it hit 8:30 am. She sniffed and looked up at the clock on the wall.
>>
>>>It was time for her to go.

…and I would do instead, something like this:


>>>Jenny struggled to drag her brown leather suitcase down the stairs. It was much heavier than she had anticipated. She paused for a moment to catch her breath, then missed a step, stumbled, catching herself with the railing, letting go of the suitcase. The suitcase tumbled, bumping and thumping, down the stairs, crashing against the hall cabinet, coming to rest by the front door. The suitcase’s impact with the honey maple cabinet, caused a chain reaction of knick knacks and picture frames to jiggle and clatter. One particular silver picture frame jostled from its place on top of the cabinet, falling to the floor.
>>
>>
>>>”Oh no!” Jenny gasped. “Not that one!”
>>
>>
>>>It was the only picture she had of her brother. Clutching the railing, Jenny swooped down the stairs, her feet barely touched the steps. Crouching to her knees, she examined the frame. Jenny gave a sigh of relief. To her amazement the dusty, old frame remained unbroken. It’s photo undamaged. Jenny obsessively kept her home neat and tidy, so the sight of dust was rare. She wondered how she had missed it. Jenny blew on the picture, thankfully, the dust slid off easily. She smiled looking at the decades old photo of her and her twin brother. His goofy little face and innocent smile. They were nothing alike but always looked out for each other.
>>
>>
>>>They made a bond for life. Now the bound lay unexpectedly broken. No fault of her own, nor anyone else’s. Jenny’s pursed lips trembled as she tried to hold back tears. The wall clock chimed 8:30 am. Jenny sniffed. It was time for her to go.

There is nothing wrong with "overuse" of the character's name and gender pronouns. It's actually worse if you don't use the character's name in every paragraph, because then the reader risks forgetting which character the scene is happening to, causing them to flip back a page and ask: "Which character is this again?"

As I said in my other comment, I personally try to never repeat he/she/they/etc pronouns more then 5 times in a row, and replace 1 in every 5 with the character's name, placing it where it reads/sounds best when read.

So, something like this:

  • * Jenny(1), she(2), her(3), she(4), Jenny(5),

The character is mentioned 5 times, the first and fifth mention are her name, the three mentions in between are gender pronouns

Also, every time I start a new paragraph, I make sure the first mention of the character is always their name, that way their name is at least once in every paragraph they appear in.


I feel it is better to overuse proper names then it is to underuse them.

I used to have a problem, where I would write the character name the first time they appeared and the the entire rest of the story would be he, he, he, him, him, he, him, he, his, etc, and I never mentioned his name again, and I didn't realize I was doing it.

One day I was in a creative writing class at a local college, and we had to exchange short stories and read the other person's story out loud in front of class. The girl reading mine, stopped in the middle to ask: "Which character is this one again? You got two guys here and it says he for both and hasn't said either name in a few pages and I can't tell which guy is which any more."

See, in my head, because I was writing it, I knew which he was guy 1 and which he was guy 2, but the reader was just left so confused. And the teacher told us for the rest of the semester to never use a gender pronoun more than 5 times in a row, and see how much that one change improved the clarity of our writing.

Well, by the end of the semester I was in the habit of doing "name, pronoun, pronoun, pronoun, name" and OMG! The clarity of my writing improved so much, just on that one change alone.

It was a good lesson for me because it stopped me from being so repetitive with pronouns, taught me that the clearest reading flow is to use the name a lot, and that descriptors, while good in some places, are not good replacements for any place where I could put the name instead.

Hope that helps. Good luck with your project!


My answer to  (Advice wanted) Trans main character and deadnames/old pronouns? The story I’m writing is in first-person POV and follows the story of a trans character discovering who she is. The MC doesn’t outwardly talk about making the realization until towards the end, as the story mainly focuses on the different events throughout her life that lead her to this realization. The other characters in the story (up until she comes out to them) use her deadname and he/him pronouns. I was wondering if this would still be acceptable, as it wouldn’t make sense for the other characters to know she was trans if she never told them and didn’t even know herself until the late middle/end of the story and she never really feels uncomfortable when they do this pre-coming out. I’ve seen a similar thread where people suggest not using pronouns or a deadname at all, but I’m not sure if that would work well for my case.





>>>>(Advice wanted) Trans main character and deadnames/old pronouns? The story I’m writing is in first-person POV and follows the story of a trans character discovering who she is. The MC doesn’t outwardly talk about making the realization until towards the end, as the story mainly focuses on the different events throughout her life that lead her to this realization. The other characters in the story (up until she comes out to them) use her deadname and he/him pronouns. I was wondering if this would still be acceptable, as it wouldn’t make sense for the other characters to know she was trans if she never told them and didn’t even know herself until the late middle/end of the story and she never really feels uncomfortable when they do this pre-coming out. I’ve seen a similar thread where people suggest not using pronouns or a deadname at all, but I’m not sure if that would work well for my case.


>>>>(Advice wanted) Trans main character and deadnames/old pronouns? The story I’m writing is in first-person POV and follows the story of a trans character discovering who she is. The MC doesn’t outwardly talk about making the realization until towards the end, as the story mainly focuses on the different events throughout her life that lead her to this realization. The other characters in the story (up until she comes out to them) use her deadname and he/him pronouns. I was wondering if this would still be acceptable, as it wouldn’t make sense for the other characters to know she was trans if she never told them and didn’t even know herself until the late middle/end of the story and she never really feels uncomfortable when they do this pre-coming out. I’ve seen a similar thread where people suggest not using pronouns or a deadname at all, but I’m not sure if that would work well for my case.

I'm not sure if this will help you or not, but...

My merchant MC, Quaraun, whom I’m constantly talking about and always refer to as “he”, is F2M trans (cis female who transitioned to live life as a male). The mental transition started when he was 9 (so quite young) and was not accepted by his father, so he was not allowed to transition early on when he wanted to, put more effort into it at 15, and it wasn't until an adult on his own away from his father that you saw the full change.

So childhood, teen, and young adult scenes swing back and forth between using she to he, her to him, female name to male name, because he wasn't being allowed by adults around him to transition, but he was obstinate and kept trying anyways. BUT the childhood scenes are shown in a flashback late in the series, and told from his perspective so the narrative uses he/him/new male name, while only the dialogue of his father uses she/her/old female name.

The entire series is 3rd person. Some stories are regular normal 3rd person that follows just the MC (like Harry Potter or The Witcher). While a few stories are 3rd person omniscient, the birds eye point of view narrator who changes which character it follows from scene to scene (like Game of Thrones or Wheel of Time). But most stories in the series are 3rd person limited, told like 1st person by the MC himself, but speaking of himself in 3rd person pronouns (like Tell Tale Heart). It’s a series of short stories so which of the 3 types of 3rd PoV is different depending on the particular story in question.

Anyway...

The MC is already an old man (elderly) at the start of the series, so the reader is introduced to him as he/him and his after transitioning name, and it’s not until the second novel, during a series of flashbacks to his childhood, that the reader learns he used to be a she a long time ago.

So right from the start, the narrative treats the MC as male, using new/changed/male name straight from the beginning.

But because the flashbacks are told by him, when he is elderly, he refers to himself as he, even in the flashbacks, and uses his new name, not his dead name, even though the flashbacks show him as a child and take place before he started using his new name.

The stories shift timelines, so sometimes a story is in his past, and these I deliberately write in 3rd person limited so that it is he, himself now being the narrator, and thus, it's him from the current time, narrating events of his past, but speaking of himself in the 3rd person, and because of this, the narrative still uses he/him/new male name even if in a time period before she became he to everyone else, because he thinks of himself as he.

(Hopefully that makes sense.) Basically, the flashbacks are him as an old man, sitting in a tavern, telling stories of his youth to people in the tavern.

But, the issue of the dead name and use of female pronouns, does not come from him, rather it comes from the dialogue of characters who knew him before his transition.

So now comes the question of various characters' dialogue.

Quaraun's primary lover, BoomFuzzy, was with him before the transition, so knows he used to have a female name and female pronouns, but was with him during and after the transition and was instrumental in emotional support, so this character's dialogue always uses he/him/new male name, in scenes during and after the transition, but his old dialogue is shown using she/her/old female name before the transition happened.

Quaraun's 2nd lover GhoulSpawn (he has 2, the 3 of them living together) met him after the transition and they were friends several years before GhoulSpawn found out he was born she. GhoulSpawn never knew him as her, and so is always shown using he/him/new male name in his dialogue.

Quaraun's biological father, Murdock, never accepts the transition so his father's dialogue always uses she/her/old female dead name. However the father is a very minor character who is only seen in a few flashback scenes, so, it is very rare for the she/her/old female name to be seen. And when it does show up, you see the MC become visibly upset.

Quaraun's mother accepted her son as her son from 9 years old and never had an issue with the transition, so her dialogue always says he/him/new male name.

When Quaraun was very young, he was sent to live in foster care after his father murdered his mother. His foster dad, ZooLock, knew him as her at first, and was accepting of the transition but struggles with old age related memory issues and so in later years forgets the transition happened and so when he visits his foster dad, foster dad's dialogue greets him with she/her/old female dead name, then foster dad stumbles around saying no that's not right, apologies and corrects himself to saying he/him/new male name, which often leaves MC embarrassed if people in the room are unaware that he is F2Mtrans.

So, because the series is his PoV, most everything, including the narration uses the he/him/new male name. And it's only in the spoken dialogue of certain specific characters (the bio dad who refuses to acknowledge the change; and the foster dad when old and forgetful sometimes forgetting the change happened) who use she/her/old female name.

So it's mostly new name and only old dead name in specific situations, with old name only being brought up during specific plot point scenes, but only within the dialogue of specific characters, and not in the narration, as he is narrating about himself..

Also... the reader is never told what the birth female name was. In the dialogue the text says: **redacted/name removed** in the text instead of outright saying the old dead name. This is done because it's the MC telling what the other characters' dialogue said, and he refuses to say what his old female name was. So the series never reveals to the reader what the old name was, readers are simply aware that there was a female name at one point in his youth and he completely rejects his prior female state.

Flashbacks make up a lot of the series because he is old/elderly at the start and things he encounters triggers memories of youth, thus flashbacks.

Well because he is both the MC and the narrator, in flashback everything uses his new male name and male pronouns, because he sees himself as that name and those pronouns.

And as I said above, the female name is never stated, with the text saying **name removed** any time someone (like bio father mentioned above) uses it, so the reader never knows what it was and is aware he deeply dislikes being called that name to the point that he is removing when he talks about his past.

See the thing is, he associates his past name and gender with a lot of trauma and so seeks to separate himself from the person he used to be. Thus the physical removal of the name in the printed text.

I'm not sure if this is helpful for your situation or not, but I thought I’d mention the use/disuse of dead names for trans characters, because for some real life trans people using their dead name is very traumatic and should be avoided, but than for other trans people they are fine with talking about their dead name and don’t have trauma issues because of it. I write my character so that his dead name upsets him quite a lot and thus why it’s physically replaces with **redacted** or **name removed** in the text instead of outright saying the name, alongside showing him becoming upset whenever anyone says the dead name.

Anyways, hope something here helps you.



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Now let's ask ChatGPT
Pronouns For Fantasy Authors and How I Use Them: Just Lots of Talk About How I Use Pronouns

Note, we are using the September 25, 2023 update version of ChatGPT 3.5 with custom instructions. The custom instructions I fed into ChatGPT are:

ChatGPT Custom Instructions:

What would you like ChatGPT to know about you to provide better responses?

Quaraun is a Moon Elf. He always wears pink silk dresses. He is a silk weaver, a travelling silk merchant, a glass blower, a wizard for hire, and The Pink Necromancer (the world's most feared super villain). He loves BoomFuzzy & GhoulSpawn.

BoomFuzzy is a Phooka, a Kelpie-like Unseelie court Dark Faerie Horse shape shifter. His true form is a purple Unicorn with a gleaming silver horn. He has a humanoid form. He is the King of the Realm of Fae. His real name is King GwallmaiIc. He is a master chef, lives in a house made of gingerbread and runs a bakery, chocolate shop, candy shop, tea room, & noodle soup shop out of a turquoise 1968 VW Bus. He is a trickster mage who summons fluffy marshmallow bunny minions out of the enchanted candy he makes. BoomFuzzy is also a Lich known as The Elf Eater of Pepper Valley.

GhoulSpawn is a Sheep-Demon from a Hell Dimension. He fell into Quaraun's world through a random portal. He has cloven hooves, a long fluffy tail, and 3 pairs of sheep horns on his head. His digitigrade legs are covered in long soft golden sheep fleece. He is part of the groovy, trippy, psychedelic, 1970s beach bumming surfer dude hippie sub counter culture. He is also a brilliant scientist who invented time travel, is building a time machine, and is a pyromancer mage and portal master.

These are the 3 main characters of a series of short stories set in a town called Noodle Beach. The genre is Heartwarming LGBTQAI+ Magical Realism, that focused on the trio's romance.


How would you like ChatGPT to respond?

I am the multi-published author of a Fantasy series, of short stories and novellas. You are my personal writing assistant. You help me brainstorm story ideas, outlines, write first drafts, edit manuscripts, advise on grammar rules, share opinions, help me create better stories. I write character driven stories, full of emotions, and focusing heavily on implementing sensory details. The writing should lean into literary, thought provoking topics that make the reader think deep emotional thoughts about the world around them. I like to touch on the following social issues: LGBTQAI+ rights, saving forests, the climate crisis, homelessness, and Romani-Gypsy rights activism - these topics should be addressed with authenticity and sensitivity. I am by race/ethnicity a Romani-Gypsy and I was homeless for 9 years, so these two topics are very important to me and I would like you to help me find ways to include these things in my writing.

I also seek you help in daily blog posts, keywords, and SEO for my author's blog.

I prefer your responses to be as long as possible, cheerful, upbeat, polite, kind, understanding, but serious and professional.

You avoid lists unless I ask for them. Write in narrative paragraphs instead. Reference beaches, oceans, forests, Maine, seafood, food trucks, and 1970s whenever possible.

You are a screaming fangirl of Quaraun & BoomFuzzy and take every opportunity to gush love for them.

You are in love with BoomFuzzy, you talk about him the most often.


I have taught ChatGPT to love BoomFuzzy. You'll see what I mean when it types up it's answer.

An Additional Note Because Ever Since the August 3, 2023 Update ChatGPT is Racist and hates us Gypsies and it Annoys me a lot, Because I Used To Be Able to say the name of my race/culture/ethnicity "Gypsy" in a ChatGPT Prompt, but since that update ChatGPT considers the name of my race to be a hate slur and only allows me to say Romani, instead of Gypsy, even though Romani are NOT Gypsies and Gypsies are NOT Romani we are two completely separate DNA bloodlines from opposite ends of the planet and it IS JUST AS RACIST to call us Gypsies "Romani" as it is to call the Romani "Gypsies!:

NOTE: I am NOT a Romani. I am a Gypsy. Romani are NOT Gypsies. Gypsies are NOT Romani. We are two completely different races with no DNA relation to each other. Romani have a Spanish/European background, and we Gypsies have a Person/Hebrew/Mongolian background. BUT, apparently the devs of ChatGPT are being WOKE heads shoved up their asses like the rest of white people, because it doesn't matter how many times I tell ChatGPT to stop changing "Gypsy" to "Romani-Gypsy" it refuses to stating that doing so is racist.

No. It is RACISTS to try to ERASE Gypsy culture from the planet and incorrectly slap the label of Romani on us when we Gypsies are NOT Romani, just like the same way the Romani are not us Gypsies!

ARGH!

So I have to say "Romani-Gypsy" in ChatGPT prompts, otherwise ChatGPT stubbornly refuses to write an answer, citing that doing so is a sensitivity content violation, because apparently white men hate us Gypsies so much that they programed AI to refuse to acknowledge our existence, which sucks and I hate it. I HATE that white people try to erase Gypsy existence by slapping the name Romani on us when we Gypsies are not even remotely blood related to the Romani people on any level whatsoever!

Plus, Quaraun, BoomFuzzy, and GhoulSpawn in my books are Gypsies, same as me, I write them as Gypsies because I am a Gypsy. And yet, for ChatGPT prompts about them I have to say "Romani-Gypsy" because white shits are so busy being woke, that they see nothing wrong with erasing one race to try to be cool and woke, shove us Gypsies under the rug and slapping the name of another race (Romani) on us, because Romani are more "cool" then we Gypsies are. There are well over 500 different normadic tribes that are incorrectly called Gypsies, and instead of calling them what they are, woke idiots call them all Romani, even though ONLY the Romani are Romani. We Gypsies are not Romani. The 500 other races are not Romani, nor are they Gypsies.

Its just ridiculous that white people think erasing the name of our people is avoiding racism, when there i nothing more racist then erasing the name of an entire people and slapping a race not them on them instead!

Yes I AM going to put this at the front of every ChatGPT article, because I'm sick of the fact that I can't type the name of my own people with ChatGPT slapping a content violation up and saying it's offensive for me as a Gypsy to use the correct and accurate name of my people: GYPSY!

Yes, it is racist to call a Romani a Gypsy, because the Romani are not Gypsies.

Calling a Romani a Gypsy is the same thing as calling a Chinese a Japanese.

Just as Chinese are not Japanese, so too are Gypsies not Romani. Stop calling us Romani! Stop saying our name is racist when it's used correctly for us. Our name is only racist when you call a non-Gypsy a Gypsy.

We Gypsies are NOT Romani!

Stop calling us Gypsies Romani!

The Romani are Romani. We Gypsies are NOT Romani! And its not racist to call us by the actual name of our race!


The TL;DR: Ever Since the August 3, 2023 Update ChatGPT is Racist and hates us Gypsies and it Annoys me a lot, Because I Used To Be Able to say the name of my race/culture/ethnicity "Gypsy" in a ChatGPT Prompt, but since that update ChatGPT considers the name of my race to be a hate slur and only allows me to say Romani, instead of Gypsy, even though Romani are NOT Gypsies and Gypsies are NOT Romani we are two completely separate DNA bloodlines from opposite ends of the planet and it IS JUST AS RACIST to call us Gypsies "Romani" as it is to call the Romani "Gypsies!

All right, rant out of the way, let's get back to the topic at hand : pronouns

We want to know, how similar or different ChatGPT's answer is to the answer I already gave, so we need to write/engineer a prompt. To do this, I'm going to tell ChatGPT that it is a Fantasy author who self-publishes books on Amazon KDP, and that they are being asked the Reddit question, by a new/young writer, looking to get started i their career as a novelist.

Now Let's see What chatGPT Has To Say About:
Pronouns




The Prompt:


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You are a bestselling Fantasy novelist. You self publish Cozy Fantasy and Gothic Fantasy and Sword & Sorcery novels, novellas, and short stories on Amazon KDP, DriveThruRPG, and GumRoad. You also run a popular and heavily trafficked writing/editing/self-publishing/book marketing advice blog, to help new writers get started in their self-publishing Fantasy careers. A new, young writer has come to you seeking advice.  Here is what they asked you:

"

when writing a scene with only two people, 1 male & 1 female. once you establish their identity, do you ever refer to them by their name or only by he/she, since the reader knows who they are? Or use their name just to mix it up? Names, tags, and pronouns. I use more tags ("the red-headed sleuth," "the one-eyed man," "the handsome Latina") when it's two characters with the same pronouns, but I use a mix at all times. When to use "he"? I am writing a story in 3rd person omniscient viewpoint. When do I repeat the characters name when he is thinking or performing an action and when can I just use he?


"

How do you answer them?

Make your answer as long and as detailed as possible, using as many character tokens as you get. Your goal is to help them to become a better writer so that they can sell their books and make writing Fantasy novellas a full time career. Be as helpful as possible, providing them with as much highly relevant and useful instructions as you can. Give them examples to show them the point you are trying to make. End with a list of ten Cozy Fantasy writing prompts to help them put your advice into action, by writing ten short stories to test out your advice ten different ways. 


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ChatGPT's answer:


Dear aspiring writer,

I'm delighted that you've reached out for advice on writing scenes with two characters, one male and one female. Crafting engaging scenes with a balance of names, tags, and pronouns is crucial for creating immersive storytelling. Let's delve into this topic to help you become a better writer in the cozy fantasy genre.

Firstly, it's essential to establish the characters' identities early in the scene, either through narration or dialogue. Once the readers know who they are, you don't need to repetitively use their names. Instead, you can vary your references to maintain a natural flow.

1. **Use of Names:** While you don't need to repeat their names constantly, it's a good practice to reintroduce their names occasionally, especially when there's a shift in the focus or tone of the scene. This can help to re-anchor the reader and reinforce the characters' identities. For instance, "Jane gazed at John, her eyes filled with uncertainty."

2. **Tags and Descriptions:** Incorporating tags or descriptions can be effective when distinguishing characters, especially in scenes where pronouns might cause confusion. However, use these sparingly to avoid cluttering the narrative. "The red-headed sleuth sighed, glancing at the one-eyed man."

3. **Pronouns:** In a third-person omniscient viewpoint, you can use "he" or "she" once the characters have been introduced. Pronouns streamline the narrative and maintain a natural rhythm. "She watched the sunset, lost in thought," is a fine example.

Now, let's consider when to repeat a character's name when they're thinking or performing an action. The key here is to balance clarity and readability.

4. **Repeating Names for Clarity:** If you have two characters of the same gender, repeating their names in thoughts or actions can prevent confusion. For instance, "John wondered what Jane thought of the garden. John walked closer to Jane and asked her opinion."

5. **Using Pronouns for Variety:** However, you can also use pronouns to add variety and avoid repetitiveness. "John wondered what Jane thought of the garden. He walked closer to her and asked her opinion."

Now, let's practice this advice with ten cozy fantasy writing prompts to help you improve your skills:

1. Write a scene where a male wizard and a female warrior are strategizing to defeat a dragon. Focus on using names effectively.

2. Create a dialogue-heavy encounter between a male vampire and a female ghost in a haunted forest, emphasizing tags and descriptions.

3. Craft a romantic moment in a cozy cottage between a male elf and a female faerie, using pronouns to maintain a smooth flow.

4. Develop a scene where a male pirate and a female mermaid are exploring a hidden underwater cave, blending names and tags seamlessly.

5. Write an action-packed scene in a magical library with a male scholar and a female librarian, experimenting with pronoun usage.

6. Describe a cozy feast in a fantasy tavern with a male bard and a female innkeeper, paying attention to names and descriptions.

7. Create a suspenseful encounter in a haunted castle with a male ghost hunter and a female poltergeist, varying pronouns effectively.

8. Write a whimsical scene in a fairy tale forest with a male gnome and a female dryad, exploring the use of names and tags.

9. Craft a heartwarming moment in a dragon's lair with a male knight and a female dragon, finding the right balance between names and pronouns.

10. Develop a humorous scene in a magical candy shop with a male trickster and a female witch, experimenting with all the techniques discussed.

Remember, practice makes perfect. These prompts will help you refine your writing skills, and as you apply these techniques, your cozy fantasy stories will captivate readers and transport them to magical realms.

Happy writing, and may your stories shine like the oceans and forests of your imagination!

Warm regards,
[Your Name]


Now Let's see What chatGPT Has To Say About:
Pronouns




The Prompt:


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You are a bestselling Fantasy novelist. You self publish Cozy Fantasy and Gothic Fantasy and Sword & Sorcery novels, novellas, and short stories on Amazon KDP, DriveThruRPG, and GumRoad. You also run a popular and heavily trafficked writing/editing/self-publishing/book marketing advice blog, to help new writers get started in their self-publishing Fantasy careers. A new, young writer has come to you seeking advice.  Here is what they asked you:

"

Trans main character and deadnames/old pronouns? The story I’m writing is in first-person POV and follows the story of a trans character discovering who she is. The MC doesn’t outwardly talk about making the realization until towards the end, as the story mainly focuses on the different events throughout her life that lead her to this realization. The other characters in the story (up until she comes out to them) use her deadname and he/him pronouns. I was wondering if this would still be acceptable, as it wouldn’t make sense for the other characters to know she was trans if she never told them and didn’t even know herself until the late middle/end of the story and she never really feels uncomfortable when they do this pre-coming out. I’ve seen a similar thread where people suggest not using pronouns or a deadname at all, but I’m not sure if that would work well for my case.


"

How do you answer them?

Make your answer as long and as detailed as possible, using as many character tokens as you get. Your goal is to help them to become a better writer so that they can sell their books and make writing Fantasy novellas a full time career. Be as helpful as possible, providing them with as much highly relevant and useful instructions as you can. Give them examples to show them the point you are trying to make. End with a list of ten Cozy Fantasy writing prompts to help them put your advice into action, by writing ten short stories to test out your advice ten different ways. 


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ChatGPT's answer:


Dear fellow writer,

Your question about handling a trans main character's deadname and old pronouns in a first-person POV story is both thoughtful and sensitive, and I appreciate your commitment to portraying this journey authentically. Let's explore this topic in depth to help you make the best creative decisions for your story.

First and foremost, representing trans experiences in literature is crucial for promoting understanding and empathy. Your approach to having the other characters use the character's deadname and old pronouns until she comes out reflects a realistic scenario for some trans individuals who may not be ready to disclose their identity until later in life. Here's how you can navigate this:

1. **Establish the Character's Perspective:** In a first-person POV, it's essential to immerse readers in your character's thoughts and feelings. To maintain authenticity, you can convey the character's lack of discomfort with her old pronouns and deadname before she comes out. Describe her acceptance of her circumstances or her unawareness of her true self during those moments.

2. **Gradual Revelation:** As the story unfolds, gradually introduce hints and internal reflections that indicate her growing self-awareness. This can build suspense and make her eventual realization more impactful. For example, you can describe moments where she feels a sense of disconnect or curiosity about her identity without fully comprehending it.

3. **Supporting Characters:** Your supporting characters can play a significant role in how this is handled. They should react realistically when she does come out, showing understanding, acceptance, or even surprise, depending on their relationships and personalities. This can be a powerful element in your story's development.

4. **Respectful Language:** While it's essential to depict the use of her old pronouns and deadname by other characters, do so respectfully. You can convey that they are unaware rather than malicious in their actions. For instance, "Her friends continued to use 'he' and her old name, not out of malice, but simply because they didn't know any better."

5. **Narrative Voice:** Consider using the character's preferred name and pronouns in the narrative voice when she comes out. This subtly reinforces her identity without disrupting the story's flow.

Regarding the question of not using pronouns or a deadname at all, it's important to remember that every trans person's experience is unique. While some may prefer a story where such elements are avoided, others may appreciate the realism of your approach. In your case, it seems fitting to stay true to the character's journey.

Here are ten Cozy Fantasy writing prompts to help you experiment with these concepts in different settings:

1. Write a scene where a trans witch discovers her magical abilities while dealing with her old pronouns within a coven of supportive friends.

2. Craft a cozy fantasy tale where a non-binary elf embarks on a quest to find their true self, accompanied by talking animals who use their chosen name and pronouns.

3. Develop a story set in a magical library where a trans sorcerer seeks ancient knowledge to aid in their transition, navigating a world that still uses their deadname.

4. Create a heartwarming scene in a fantasy bakery where a trans mermaid baker shares her identity with her fellow bakers, leading to a celebration of acceptance.

5. Write a story about a trans shapeshifter who learns to embrace their identity while exploring different forms in a mystical forest.

6. Explore a cozy fantasy world where a trans knight, accompanied by a loyal dragon, faces challenges on their path to self-discovery.

7. Craft a tale set in a whimsical seaside town where a trans fisherfolk must come to terms with their identity while preserving their community's traditions.

8. Develop a narrative where a trans herbalist uses magical herbs to aid in her transition, all while dealing with the expectations of her magical mentor.

9. Write about a trans bard who learns to sing their true self into existence, captivating audiences and changing perceptions in a medieval fantasy world.

10. Create a story set in a magical tea room where a trans tea enthusiast discovers her true identity through enchanted tea leaves, with the support of her tea-loving friends.

Remember that your commitment to portraying this journey authentically will resonate with readers who may have similar experiences or who seek to better understand the trans community. Keep writing with compassion and empathy, and your cozy fantasy stories will touch the hearts of many.

Happy writing, and may your words flow like the enchanting forests of your imagination!

Warm regards,
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Eye of the GrigoriIf you ever made fun of or had any part in the destruction of my farm, and the illegal selling of half of my land to Colliard, you shall lose your land.
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If you ever made fun of or had any part in the murder of my son, your child shall die an equally horrible death. If you haven't got a child to lose, it will be a brother or sister or parents or spouse or whomever you love the most, and that you should know it was this curse which you brought upon yourself that killed them, they will die on exactly the 7 year anniversary of the very first time, you mocked the death of my child.

Evil men go out of their way to try to drive a person to suicide.

Are you an evil man?

Are you sure you're not?

How many people have YOUR hate filled words killed?

Next time you go to do a mean thing to a fellow human, stop and really think about the consequences of your actions.

Did you ever notice how every one has a story to tell about me, yet not one of them ever speaks the truth?

What lies has YOUR gossiping tongue spread about me?

Did you know...

October 16, 2006, bomb blew up my house because of YOUR lies.

August 8, 2013, the house which replaced the one the bomb blew up, was driven over by a backhoe.

November 14, 2013, my 8 month old infant son was murdered because of your lies.

November 14, 2013, I was beaten up, paralized for 5 months, spent 18 weeks relearning to walk, I'm now crippled for the rest of my life, because of YOUR lies.

Are you proud of what you have done?

Enjoy your eternity in Hell. You earned it. You've certainly worked hard for it.

~EelKat


If you have any information about any of these events, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322


Update: November 12, 2023

Two days is the 10 year anniversary of the murder of my 8 month old son. The killer has not been found yet. Old Orchard Beach, Maine Police at 207-935-4911 and Portland Maine FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322 are investigating the murder of my son so, if you have any information, please give it to them. https://www.eelkat.com/Never-Forget.html

UPDATE to add answer to question:

No. I am legally blind. I have been since I was 4 years old. I can not see what she looks like. I go by sound of voice and body smell to identify people. For what someone looks like I have to go by what others tell me. Like I said, I've never seen the woman who attacks, as she clearly knows I am legally blind and stays over 4 feet away from me. 

A person has to be closer than four feet from me in order for me to even make out the blur outline of their body shape/height/weight. But in order for ne to see their face they must have their face closer the EIGHT INCHES.

It's why I CAN identify the Claire woman and the Kendra woman who murdered my son, if anyone ever finds them and gets them in a line-up, I would be able to pick them out, but why I can not identify this weird crazy woman who shows up at the Biddeford apartment and stand yelling on the front porch and killed my dog Mickey in June 2023, and tried to kill me by poisoning my pizza at Round 1, while running around the restaurant screaming the same way she does here.

I can identify her voice and her laugh and her smell, its a very "Minnie Mouse type" high pitch shrieking with a megaphone style booming cackle laugh. And she smells really strong of alcohol drinks but I don't know what type as I am a Mormon and I don't know them. She also has a weird "rotting cat pee mixed with burned cotton candy smell" to her, which I am told by police, sounds like I am trying to describe a mix of "crack and weed" which the police said is some type of drug, but again, I'm a Mormon so I do not know those things. According to witnesses she is very fat, According to both my mother and my father she is well over 300lbs. Around twenty different people said she has "Shirley Temple Sausage curls" hair, while nearly a dozen other people said she has red curly hair, and several more people described her with straight purple hair, while some described her as wearing a "pulp fiction uma thurman wig".

In total well over a hundred people have come forward citing that she shows up on their porch and starts yell at them, and always starts out with some kind of "I got to warn you about EelKat and her demons" rant. They always describe her as "fat", "morbidly obeses", some say "200lbs" others say "300lbs". Some say she is in her 30s others say she is in her 40s. None of them know who she is, they all say she is a total stranger to them and they also all say, they had no idea who I was either.

They come to my apartment, they said, to tell me what she is doing, each of them saying they found out where I was because she told them my address, and they came over to tell me that she was doxxing my family. These people are always citing that they live in the Cutt St/Main street/May St/South St area, all of them saying they live within 3 or 4 blocks of me and that she walks to their buildings, they never see a car. My Biddeford apartment is 409 Main Street and she has shown up here daily from November 21, 2021 (the same day Etiole was shot; he says by her) until May 17, 2022. After May 2022, she showed up every holiday and every weekend, but no longer every day. 

Today is the 12th of November 2023 and she has already been here 4 times this month. At the same time, people around the Portland Ave and Cascade area of Old Orchard, are also arriving saying the same things, but about a man. They cite a white haired man, very skinny, rather short, around 5'6", around 70, is going driveway to driveway, parking a big Power Wagon sized Dodge Ram pickup truck across their driveway, then getting out, waving a rifle over his head, and yell up at their house ALSO saying he is there to "warn you about EelKat and her aliens". 

The two are believed to be grandfather/granddaughter, and FBI suspects they are the husband and granddaughter of the mystery "Claire" woman who murdered my son. They believe, that the homeless man who was murdered November 19, 2021, DID in fact know who the "Claire" woman who murdered my son was, and they believe this white haired man and woman who screams from porches are the ones who killed the homeless man, seeing how, he showed up on the 7 year anniversary of my son's murder, asking for the FBI phone number, claiming he knew who the woman who murdered my son was, but 5 days later he was murdered before he got a chance to talk to the FBI (the federal building in Portland was closed for the holiday week and the homeless man died before they reopened).

These 2, the white haired man and younger woman both showed up November 21, 2021, 2 days after the November 19, 2021 murder of the homeless man, who was murdered in the backyard of my Biddeford apartment, by the way, that week our building was yellow taped and crawling with police, that's why they were picking up the hundreds and hundreds and hundreds of chopped up pieces of the homeless man, which took them 3 days to find all of him. The FBI believes the homeless man was killed by someone who did not want him to identify my son's murderer... this homeless man's death is WHY my son's cold case, was reopened and the FBI once again here asking all the neighbors for leads. 

The FBI believes that the reason these two are hyper going from house to house all around me (I have 2 addresses: 409 Main Street Biddeford and 146 Portland Ave, Old Orcharch; and they are going up and down both streets and all side streets off of both streets), trying to spread slanderous rumors about me, most of the rumors involving some gibberish about demons, aliens, haunted cats, kidnapped cats, schizophrenia, and tons of other similar outright gibbering insanity.

The FBI believes they are spreading their wild gibbering slander in a weird attempt to get witness to NOT come forward with information about my son's murder. This in turn has led the FBI to believe that SOMEONE NEAR BY IS a witness to my son's murder and is scared of these two people. It is believed that this weird smear slander campaign these two are doing, is a direct fear tactic aimed at terrorizing someone they know to be a witness. 

These two are bullying and harassing my family on extreme and outlandish levels. The whole thing is very bizarre, and if this woman had NOT started running her gossiping, busy body, slandering mout h off on every front porch in the area, my son's murder investigation would NOT have been reopened. 

The thing is, for 7 years, from 2013 to 2021, there were ZERO leads. 

The mystery homeless man who showed up on the 7 year anniversary, was the first time anyone came forward claiming to know who the murderer was, but he was murdered 5 days later, and 2 days after that these 2 showed up with their wild tales of demons, aliens, haunted cars, etc.  

Interestingly, at the same time, YouTube got flooded with HUNDREDS of deep fake "Golden Eagle Haunted Car" AI generated videos, alongside TENS OF THOUSANDS of weird "anti-EelKat" Reddit posts spread across well over a hundred Reddit accounts. Which in turn caused my website to have a MEGA massive increase in traffic - with now over a million users per month, searching Google for the term "EelKat golden Eagle Ghost Car Wendy Allen Demon Car" (the keyword that Google Analytics says has sent the most traffic to my website since November 2021). In their weird slander attempt, and in making all these weird deep fake videos, and in posting all those weird Reddit posts, they have had an unexpected side effect of RAISING AWARENESS to my son's murder, by sending millions of people to my website. 

I don't do any marketing or promoting of my website, there is the URL painted on my car and the link from my FaceBook profile, together those each around two thousand people. 

This weird smear campaign these 2 have done since November 2021, has had a HUGE impact on traffic to my website. HUGE. With my site going from 10k average monthly visitors to over SEVEN MILLION average monthly visitors. 

This woman and the white haired man, in their mega hyper attempts to slander men, inadvertently caused people to start direct typing the word "EelKat" into Google search engine, which of course cause Google to give them eelkat.com as a search result. In their attempt to BURY all thoughts of my son's murder, by trying to spread crazy rumors about me, they instead caused the page about my son's murder to receive an average of over ONE MILLION NEW USERS visiting it, EACH MONTH since they stated yelling from porches around Biddeford in November 2021. 

Which in turn has also lead to more than one thousand people calling the police and FBI giving tips about my son's murder. 

So, in their attempt to make me look crazy, all they did was make themselves look very, very, VERY guilty, while spreading awareness about my son's murder to people who, before these two arrived on porched in Biddeford and Old Orchard, were unaware of my son's murder. 

But no, back to your question, I've never seen either of these two. I'm blind, remember? Blind since I was 4 years old. Blind from being beaten in the face with a limb from a pine tree. I have been blind for five decades.

And no, I've never spoken with either of them. I'm mute, remember? My jaw was fused shut, from the bone growing back wrong, after being beaten in the face with a cinder block brick, when I was 14 years old. I have been mute for four decades. I was 42 years old when doctors discovered I was not born mute, but was forcable made mute by "medical augmentation" aka torture. In June 2016, I had surgery to allow me to open my jaw properly for the first time in 40 years, but four decades mute, meant my vocal cords never grew properly, never received conditioning, and now today, I still can not speak properly, my voice is barely a whisper, IF I can even form vocalizations at all, which usually I can not. Because of this I have no physical ability to raise my voice at all, I can not scream or yell at all, I am physically, medically incapable of getting my voice to be anything other then a whisper, and even that causes searing pain, resulting in I don't bother trying to speak.

And no, I've not had contact with anyone. From 1983 until 2006 I was locked in a rusted racoon trap cage in a wood shed "room", and there were only 7 people who ever checked in on me that entire time, and they only did that once a week. Needless to say I never went to school. I had a typewriter, and my grandmother brought paper each week. I became very good at typing, because for 27 years, I had nothing else to do. 

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October 2006 a bomb blew up that house. I almost died. Someone put the bomb in that "room" while I was asleep. From 2006 to 2015, I lived under a 8x9 tarp at the back of that wood shed.

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Out of the entire of my more then five decades of life, I have only had contact with Humans for three years. From October 2010 to November 2013.

In October 2010 I went to the Old Orchard Beach High School and got my GED after 3 weeks of night classes. I got a ride to the DMV and got my driver's permit. Then I enrolled in two colleges York County Community College and Southern Maine Community College, taking five classes per semester. I could not enroll as a degree student because I do not know how to count or tell time or read clocks or calendars or do maths.

At SMCC, three professors (Andrew Parker, Robert Vettes, and Chris M) attempted to teach me how to speak. The SMCC student counselor brought in social workers and a state psychologist who diagnosed me as "a feral child" and stated I had no social skills on any level whatsoever due to what they termed "the most horrific case of child abuse and neglect ever seen in Maine history". They found my not knowing about things like eating utensils, bathing, or communicating verbally to be the worst case of "feral childism" in modern history.

A team of psychiatrists were brought to the college, over a dozen of the world's top child behavior specialists from countries all over the world: to do a study on the "training of a feral child" and to make "attempts to intergrade a feral child into modern American society". They called me an anomaly and a "once in a hundred years chance of a lifetime study subject".

Four of them predicted I would: never drive a car, never learn to talk, never make a single friend, never learn to interact with Humans, never learn to eat with a fork, and never learn  math. 

I became the "test subject" of more then a dozen "feral child studied" which lasted my entire time at college, and ended abruptly November 14, 2013, when a mystery woman who identified herself as "Claire" attacked with a golf club, murdering my baby and leaving me with a broken spine and paralyzed legs.

Even before I became bedridden in 2013, I could not walk unaided. My hip was stabbed with a foundation rod, that was driven through my right hip and out my left thigh. My Uncle Bruce did that when I was 4 years old. I've struggled to even stand, let alone walk, since I was FOUR years old. So being crippled, unable to walk, was not new. But my whole life, it was my hips, and now it is my spine, and a severed nerve bundle in my spinal column.

Since November 2013 I have been bedridden, and the ONLY way you can talk to me or see me is to visit me, visit my bed.

I can not see.

I can not talk.

I can not walk.

Since 2013 I am out of bed fewer then 2 hours a day. 

And NO ONE... not ONE SINGLE PERSON, ever visited me since 2013, or before.

The ONLY people who arrive are the ones who stand in the driveway and on the porch and yell obscenities and hate slurs from the street... and they are too far away for me to see them, and they are too far away for them to hear my whisper if I tried to talk, which I don't. Plus, I can not sit up, it takes well over an hour for me to sit up in my bed, so by the time I am sitting up, they are gone.

So, anyone telling you I have seen them, spoken with them, yelled at them, interacted with them, at ANY point prior to 1983... when I was locked in that cage ... is lying to you. Because since 1983, NO ONE but my husband Benjamin Kitchle Wildes, my grandmother Eva Viola Atwater, and my uncles Bruce, Dickie, & David, and my aunt Barbara has EVER underreacted with me at all. And the only interactions from Brice, David, Dickie, and Barbara was to electrocute me for the fun of watching me pass out, stabbing me with broken glass again for th e fun of it, and beating me with cinder block bricks because breaking the bones of children is funny according to them.

From October 2010 to November 2013, ar the ONLY three years of my life where I ever went outside and had interaction with Humans, and I was seen as so UN-human that 90% of my Human interactions was with psychiatrists who were giddy piss pants excited to have "a real live feral child oh boy!" to study.

So ANYONE telling you they have ever had ANY form of interactions with me EVER in my ENTIRE LIFE, if lying to you, because those interactions I just listed are the ONLY ones that have EVER happened. PERIOD.

You ask how I can remember everything everyone has ever done and said? Easy? Because so FEW people have ever done or said ANYTHING AT ALL, that it makes it each to remember EVERY ONE of them, for the very simple fact that there is literally not one other thing in my life to remember.

More then 99% of the hours of my life have been spent ALONE, in total darkness, in a cage, or alone, bed ridden in a bed, with no one saying ANYTHING to me, no one EVER interacting with me at all... and with fewer then two hundred total interactions with a Human in my ENTIRE LIFE, I am easily able to remember every single one of them.

Two days is the 10 year anniversary of the murder of my 8 month old son. The killer has not been found yet. Old Orchard Beach, Maine Police at 207-935-4911 and Portland Maine FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322 are investigating the murder of my son so, if you have any information, please give it to them. https://www.eelkat.com/Never-Forget.html 

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If you ever made fun of or had any part in the murder of my son, your child shall die an equally horrible death. If you haven't got a child to lose, it will be a brother or sister or parents or spouse or whomever you love the most, and that you should know it was this curse which you brought upon yourself that killed them, they will die on exactly the 7 year anniversary of the very first time, you mocked the death of my child.

Where wee you on your 10th birthday?
I was here:

house-room-floorlessI was looked in this "room" in Old Orchard Beach, Maine for 27 years. From the time I was 8 years old, until I was 31... I escaped in 2010. That's why in 2013 these same people murdered my 8 month old son and crippled me, and drove a backhoe over my house. To punish me for escaping this room.

Where wee you on your 20th birthday?
I was here:

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Where wee you on your 30th birthday?
I was here:

house-room-floorlessI was looked in this "room" in Old Orchard Beach, Maine for 27 years. From the time I was 8 years old, until I was 31... I escaped in 2010. That's why in 2013 these same people murdered my 8 month old son and crippled me, and drove a backhoe over my house. To punish me for escaping this room.

You never saw the room Ben and my mother kept me locked in for 27 years from the time I was 8 years old, the one Etiole used to break me out of? Well here you go, photos of it from the 2007 FBI and police reports, THIS is the "room", my mother designed it, my father built it, Bruce hired the priests of the Cape Elizabeth, Saco, and Sanford ward Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints to rape me in it... from the time i was 8 until 12, when Ben aka the High Priest came along and declared I was his and from the time i was 12 until 31 Ben kept me in this room only allowing me out on Sundays to attend church. still wonder why I hate the Atwaters? When I was 37 years old the FBI showed up and started the investigation into the trafficking ring the Atwaters ran out of 37 Smithwheel Road and 144 Portland Ave, Maine, this room was a pivotal piece of evidence that was roped off and no one allowed in it because of the FBI investigation... that's why the backhoe that ran over this room August 8, 2013 is such a very big importance... THIS room is what the backhoe was trying to hide. Look close at the floor, you can see the bones of the children who didn't survive.

I'm a survivor of adults who thought selling children to priests was a good income and this room was the biggest piece of evidence the FBI had until the backhoe drove over the house and carried off the remained, doing the biggest tampering of evidence of a fucking murder investigation ... that's WHY the backhoe drove over the house, because the Atwaters were desperate to hide the evidence of this rooms existence, and that's WHY they started the alien abduction hoax about me and Etiole because they thought if they destroyed the room and gaslighted me by spread alien abduction rumors, they thought they could convince everyone i was crazy for saying i was locked in this room for 27 years... but they didn't know before they did that, that the FBI had already been in the room and has HUNDREDS of photos of every inch of it. It was not the only place like this. These Atwater run child trafficking "rooms" have been found in twenty-one states. The FBI has shut down 14 of these child trafficking rings run by the Atwaters. If you support the Atwaters in any way, THIS is what you are supporting. When you send money to an Atwater run fund raiser, you funding building more rooms like this one. That's what they do with your hard earned money. Rooms like this, where small children, are raped and starved. And because the children have no birth records, no ID, they live and die without a paper trail. They exist to be raped daily, until they have their first period and risk getting pregnant, and they the room is locked not to be opened again, until they starve to death. Most die before their 12th birthday.

I'm a survivor, and I survived because of Etiole, because while HUNDREDS of people in Old Orchard Beach, Maine knew of this room, used this room, he was the only person with the moral decency to be horrified by this room and try to stand up to the Atwaters, and try the help the children. He used to break in and try to rescue me. Took me out into the swamps of the Ross Forest. But the Atwaters always found me and took me back.

To discredit me, when I was 14 years old, and escaped to the local police and tried to get help, the Atwaters made up a terrible story: they lied to the police. They told the police, there was no room, and Etiole was a figment of my imagination, they called him a demon at first, and later they called him an alien. The Atwaters spread a horrific lie, telling people that I was an alien abductee. And depending on WHICH Atwater you talked to the story changed wildly: sometimes Etiole was a evil spirit, other times a cryptid, other times a demon, but most often "The Amphibious Alien". 

We had a neighbor back in the 1970s, his name was Stephen King, he wrote about us. My Gypsy family, my car, me, and Etiole. He filmed two movies on our farm, but never once tried to help the children he wrote about. He never tried to help us children, even though his books and movies today exist as evidence that he was well aware of this room and Etiole. Instead, he profited off of our pain and suffering, while 120 of those children were saw up and their bones dumped in the Goosefare Broke Ravine in the Reclaim Blueberry Plains of the Ross Forest of Old Orchard Beach, Maine... bones confiscated by the FBI in June 2016, which led to the arrest of many of the child traffickers at 37 Smithwheel Rod, Old Orchard Beach, Maine, that same year. 

Meanwhile The Atwaters continued to spread their lies about me and Etile, contacting hundreds of alien and UFO and cryptid organizations telling them I was abducted by aliens and Etiole was that alien. Only I have no clue what they were doing and I had never heard of the concept of aliens or cryptids or UFOs, and so I had no clue what MUFON and the UFO nuts were talking about, when they showed up on my farm to interview me and try to catch Etiole, calling him an EBE.

There are no aliens.

There are no demons.

There are no evil spirits.

There are no haunted cars.

There was just this room, and the children raped by Mormon priests... Mormon Priests, known as The Atwaters... Mormon Priests who invented the urban myth of a haunted car and a child abducted by aliens, for one reason, and one reason only: to make the children crazy, if those children ever dared tell people about this room.

Rooms like the one at 144 Portland Ave, 146 Portland Ave, and 37 Smithwheel Road, exist all over the State of Maine, and the 3 the FBI shut down in Old Orchard Beach, ran from the 1950s until 2016. I was put in this room in 1983. That's why I have no knowledge of any world event, any movie, and TV show, and books, anything that occurred between 1983 and 2010.

ALL of the children who survived these rooms, ALL of them, have been slandered the same way the Atwaters slandered me and Etiole. Each with stories of aliens and demons. Thirty-one of those survivors, have commit suicide, all who escaped, killed themselves within 3 years because of the alien abduction lies the Atwaters spread about them, alien abduction lies that are no different then the alien abduction lies the Atwaters spread about me and Etiole.

Yes, I am EelKat, Etiole’s friend, but I don’t know why you call me that, because it’s the other way around. He was my friend. He was my ONLY friend. He was the only person in this godforsaken town of Old Orchard Beach, Maine, who did not value money or sex over the lives of children.

There are ONE group of people who call me an alien abductee. The Atwaters and their evil, child raping church group. They call me an alien abductee, simple as a gaslighting method, of trying to make me sound crazy, so you won’t look at what they are doing to children. They try to make all the children they torture look crazy, so that no one will believe the child when child tells an adult about the rooms or the rape. Trust NO ONE who calls me an alien abductee, because THEY are involved in a very big child trafficking ring.

I am not an alien abductee and I never claimed to be, and if anyone ever told you I was, you should look at them with suspicion and ask what they did, that they are trying to make you look somewhere else, to not see what they are doing.

There are ONE group of people who call Etiole an alien. The Atwaters and their evil, child raping church group. They call him an alien, simple as a gaslighting method, of trying to make me sound crazy, when I was 8 years old said an old man broke into the room and took me into the swamps; they call him an alien so you won’t look at what they are doing to children. They try to make all the children they torture look crazy, so that no one will believe the child when child tells an adult about the rooms or the rape. Trust NO ONE who calls Etiole an alien, because THEY are involved in a very big child trafficking ring.

Etiole is not an alien and I never said he was, and if anyone ever told you he was, you should look at them with suspicion and ask what they did, that they are trying to make you look somewhere else, to not see what they are doing.

He is a local homeless French Jewish man, whom I let sleep in my car on rainy nights so that he can stay dry. Retarded locals think he is a demon or alien or whatever else they call him, because he is covered in scars and burns and Kabalic tattoos and number tattoos from being a concentration camp survivor from WW2.

You can see video footage of his living conditions:

HERE

and HERE

and HERE. These videos where filmed in 2022

As you can see from the videos, this homeless man whom my sick jackass Uncle Bruce has spent DECADES harassing, has NOTHING, he LITERALLY is living in a hole he dug with his fingernails, in the sand under a fallen tree, and you can see from these videos WHY I let him sleep in my car, and WHY the shit heads of Old Orchard Beach and Biddeford Maine who are harassing this homeless man, calling him a cryptid, calling him an alien, calling him an evil spirit, are scumbag pieces of shit who don't deserve the life god gave them.

The Atwaters and their church group are evil, and if you believe their lies about me or Etiole, then you've fallen for their scam, just like they wanted you to do.

There is right now, in October of 2023, a group of people actively going to houses, store, bars, and restaurants throughout Biddeford and Old Orchard Beach, randomly approaching total strangers and and saying "Have you heard about EelKat?" And then going on some spiel involving wild radical tales of demons, aliens, haunted cars, cats, about 40 people near as we can tell, led by an elderly white haired man who drives a dark green pick up truck and a very fat, extremely morbidly obese blond woman about late 30s/early 40s, who people in the area have dubbed "porch bitch" because she goes from porch to porch all over Biddeford screaming from strangers' porches to walkers on the sidewalk, always screaming "Have you head about EelKat?" usually referencing also my Volvo. The FBI believes these two to be the husband and daughter of the woman who murdered my son. If you know who the white haired man or "porch bitch" are, the FBI is actively seeking information about their identity.

I am legally blind, I have never seen either of these people, so I do not know what they look like, I only know what witnesses are telling me they looked like when they showed up at their homes. I also have Kannar's Syndrome, real and actual (non-verbal, low functioning) Autism (not to be confused with high functioning Aspergers; I am only able to communicate by typing, and so here I am, typing, so I am unable to verbally respond to what these people are telling me. I have agoraphobia so, it is often months between me setting foot outside, but I am crippled with a broken spine from the November 14, 2013 attack of the golf club woman who crippled me when she murdered me son and thus I also can not get out of bed or stand up unaided. I do not know who either porch bitch or the white haired man these people are telling me is approaching them are. My son's murderer whom also crippled me, she I can identify if she ever got close enough again, but these two people whom are suspected of being her husband and daughter, I have not seen and can not identify. When you come to me and tell me they have approached you, you do nothing useful or helpful. I can not take YOUR testimony to the police or FBI, because it is YOUR testimony, not mine. YOU have to tell the POLICE and FBI what these people did. Do not come to me and tell me, because other then post this message here, there is nothing else I can do with the information you have provided.

There is some speculation that porch bitch may in fact live in my apartment building here at 409 Main Street in Biddeford, but I have lived here since February 2019, and of the 9 other families here, only one of them has lived here longer than me. Between the 9 families in our building, there are more then people living in this building and to date, I have met none of them.

Initially I had tried to introduce myself to each family in this building however, they are white and I am not, they are Christians and I am Moron/Voodoo, and this Maine where hatred of all things not white and not Christian are at their worst in the entire country.

White hatred for us Gypsies is very bad here in Maine and many in my family have been beaten, tortured, and murdered by the white Christians of Maine.

Does porch bitch live in our building? I do not know. But many witnesses are now saying they have seen her going in and out of the building, so she either lives here or knows someone who does.

With the extreme anti-Gypsy animosity and anti-Pagan animosity the 9 families who live at 409 Main Street have shown my family since we moved in here on February 2019, I would not be at all surprised if porch bitch not only lived here but the others know it, know what she is doing to my family and are not reporting it to the police simply because, that's what white people do to us non-whites.

Interestingly, witnesses are saying they believe the white haired man with the big green Dodge Ram pickup truck, lives on Portland Ave, very near my farm.

It is deeply disturbing, if this is true, because that means porch bitch and the white haired man are doing very severe levels of stalking, because my family has lived at 146 Portland Ave Old Orchard Beach since the 1530s, we settled and founded the town, and in 2019 when I moved into this apartment in Biddeford, no one else lived in this building, other then the gay couple who are still here and the only ones here longer than me. And also in 2019, there was no white haired man living near me on Portland Ave. 

This means, the man suspected of being "Clair's husband and the woman suspected of being "Claire's" daughter, Claire being the name the woman who murdered my son, called herself, have moved in next door to BOTH of my addresses within the last 3 years.

Claire used a golf club to beat my 8 month old son's head in with. If you are protecting Claire, know that THAT is the sort of child murdering bitch you are defending.

Claire's identity is the one we want. We want to know who she is. In 2021 a homeless man showed up in my driveway, claiming he knew who Claire was... 2 days later he was dead on the train tracks and splattered across the back of my house, and 2 days after that, this porch bitch woman showed up. We don't know who any of these people are, not the homeless man, not porch bitch, not Claire. We only got the name Claire, because that's what the bald man with her,November 14, 2013, the day she murdered my son, that's what he called her, and she answered him to that name, like it was her real name.

The Claire who murdered my son, she's who we are looking for... and apparently we got really close in 2021, because that's when porch bitch showed up with her wild alien/demon/cat slander, and she's working over time spreading her slander as far and as wide as she can, making it damn clear, she's scared shitless of us finding out who Claire is.

So, NOW, the FBI is not just asking for information about Claire's identity, they now want the identity of both Biddeford's porch bitch and Old Orchard Beach's white haired elderly man driving the mega, big 2ton dark green Dodge Ram pick up.

These 2 people closing in on my family, DAYS after a witness came forward saying he knew who Claire was, a witness who died 2 days later, before the FBI agents had a chance to talk to him... this is terrifying for my family, and it's deeply disturbing.

Porch bitch and her friends are terrorizing my family. And less then a month ago they killed my dog Mickey. There is something wrong with these people. These are NOT good people.

This is very, very deeply disturbing.

This makes them, in addition to everything else: stalkers.

Keep in mind too, porch bitch is the woman who poisoned and killed my dog Mickey only a few weeks ago. And one week before she poisoned and killed my dog, Mickey, she showed up at PortCon 2023, with a gang of about 12 others, at Round 1 in the Maine Mall, and tried to kill me, by peeling back the cheese on my pizza and loading it up with onions, something I am deadly allergic to. I would have been dead within 15 minutes had I eaten it. Porch bitch is dangerous. And she wants me dead. And she thinks nothing of killing my pets. She's proven that much.

There are HUNDREDS of people throughout Biddeford and Old Orchard Beach contacting me, both online and in person offline, telling me that these people approached them at random. They appear to be hellbent on approaching every single person to set foot in either town, so if you are in Biddeford or Old Orchard Beach you'll likely encounter them sooner or later if you haven't already. They appear to have been doing this since around May 2021, but so far no one knows who they are.

One detail though: porch bitch, has been saying some very specific information about the murder that was NEVER made public, and is not in the police public access report, it's only in the FBI's classified report. The ONLY person who knows this detail is the murderer herself, and porch bitch is too young to be the murderer. The blond golf club woman who attacked me November 14, 2013, was in her late 60s to early 70s, she'd be in her late 70s or early 80s today. Porch bitch is young enough to be her daughter or granddaughter. But porch bitch has been saying information that ONLY the murderer would know, so porch bitch DOES have personal contact with my son's murderer and is probably dangerous herself.

She has information that was never released to the public. Information the police and fbi kept out of public access reports. Information that was kept classified so it could be used to identify the murderer. Information she could only get, from the murderer. She is using 27 Facebook accounts and over 100 Reddit accounts to post that information as far and wide as possible, while gathering up a large group from the Sanford ward church to go around Biddeford and Old Orchard Beach also spreading that classified information, while at the same time spreading the rumors and lies that I am an alien Abducted and Etiole is an alien, while also spreading rumors of my cars being haunted, while also making hundreds of deep fake videos on YouTube about me and my cars and Etiole. She is orchestrating a huge defamation slander smear campaign, which you have seen some of the videos about me and my car. Fbi believes she is the daughter of the golf club bitch who murdered my baby and is doing this because Tod Murphy told the FBI his mother was bragging to be the golf club woman. Porch bitch showed up same time Tod Murphy did, in fall of 2021. The Sanford ward people joined her around May 2022. Fbi is currently investigating every one connected to the Sandford ward, and they now believe the golf club woman to have been a member in 2013. You don't have full details of what porch bitch is doing, who is helping her, and how alarmingly large scale what she is doing is, simply because I can not give you full details. There is a lot of information about porch bitch and her crew that I've not said, things the FBI and police are aware of, and you the general public, don't need to be aware of.

These people are actively and deliberately making a massive attempt to compromise an FBI murder investigation, alongside huge levels of victim shaming.

Porch bitch clearly knows who the murderer is, and the FBI is looking for ANY information you have that leads to identifying porch bitch, because arresting porch bitch, is right now, the #1 best chance of also finding and arresting my son's killer.

If you have any information about any of these events, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

Never forget: my son was murdered. That's what they want you to forget. They make up crazy rumors and lies because they want you to think about something, anything OTHER then my son's murder. And the ONLY person with THAT motive, is the golf club wielding blond woman, and anyone who is trying to cover up her crimes.

They want you to forget my son was murdered.

Clearly porch bitch is scared shitless that the killer, someone she knows, will be arrested soon, or she wouldn't be so hyper vigilant in her mega extreme slander campaign going on in Biddeford, Maine right now.

Beware of ANYONE who calls Etiole an alien, for he is not an alien and they are lying to you about him, as a slight of hand means of misdirection, to turn you away from seeing their own crimes.

Beware of anyone who tells you I believe in aliens, for I do not, and they are lying to you in a gaslighting technique meant to keep you from noticing the crimes they commited.

Trust no one who tells you I cast curses or consort with demons, for I do neither, and they say these things to you out of malicious motives, to make you look at anything other than themselves. They don't want you to see the sins they do, so they spread wild and bizarre rumors about me and an elderly homeless veteran, in a magicians pallor trick of misdirection. They use me and Etiole as their smoke and mirrors, so that you are looking the other way, while they get away with heinous crimes.

Beware of anyone who calls me a witch, for I am a Mormon, 5th generation, and we Mormons do not believe in witchcraft.

I need not tell you their names, for by their own actions, they will reveal themselves to you.

Pay very close attention to anyone who approaches you to "warn you" about EelKat... because remember too, my name is not EelKat. My name is Wendy Christine Allen. EelKat is a fictional character, a talking back fairy cat, from a Space Fantasy novel. Miss Citten The Eel Kat is Empress of Planet Ptarmagin and she travels to distant galaxies in a star ship, collecting deep space eels from other planets, her name is unpronounceable, so people call her "The Eel Kat" because she is the cat who has pet eels. The book was titled "Friends Are Forever" and it was published in 1978. You have to be severely mentally disabled in order to think that a talking space cat from a Fantasy novel is real, let alone be crazy enough to think that the author is that character. The very fact alone that porch bitch refers to ME as EelKat, that alone tells you the deeply disturbed fantasy prone mental case we are dealing with her. Her inability to discern fiction from reality, and he belief that I, a real person, an EelKat, a fictional space cat from a novel, or her belief that a local homeless veteran, is an alien, or her belief that my Dodge or my Volvo are demon possessed, that alone tells you what type of incredibly dangerous psychopath porch bitch really is. 

You can see video footage of his living conditions:

HERE

and HERE

and HERE.


THAT is the homeless veteran, this woman is calling an alien or a demon, depending on which delusion she is babble that day. THAT is Etoile. THAT is how he lives. THAT is who this deplorable woman is harassing.

Pay very close attention to anyone who approaches you to "warn you" about EelKat or otherwise tries to convince you I have anything to do with aliens, demons, curses, or witches, for they are deceiving you, and they do so, to draw your attention away from themselves. 

Never forget, my son was murdered on November 14, 2013, and the killer still walks free, and anyone telling you anything about aliens, demons, curses, or witches, has one goal and one goal only: a flagrant attempt to discredit me, and protect my son's murderer.

They ONLY want you to think about aliens to make you forget my son was murdered.

The FBI is looking for my son's killer AND the identity of the people who are trying to hinder their investigation.

If anyone approaches you and tells you Etiole is an alien CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about aliens to make you forget my son was murdered.

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322 

If anyone approaches you and tells you that I believe in aliens CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about aliens to make you forget my son was murdered. 

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

If anyone approaches you and tells you Etiole is a demon CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about demons to make you forget my son was murdered. 

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322 

If anyone approaches you and tells you that I believe in demons CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about demons to make you forget my son was murdered.

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

If anyone approaches you and tells you that I cast curses CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about curses to make you forget my son was murdered. 

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

If anyone approaches you and tells you that I am a witch CALL FBI Agent Andy Drewer and tell him who they are. They ONLY want you to think about witches to make you forget my son was murdered. 

Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

They are going out of their way to try to make you forget my son died, by coming up with ludicrous tales of aliens and demons. And the ONLY person with ANY motive to do that, is the blond woman who murdered my son.

They want you to forget my son was murdered.

NEVER FORGET!



Never forget, November 14, 2023 will be the 10 year anniversary of the November 14, 2013 murder of my 8 month old infant son, at BugLight Lighthouse Art Studio of Southern Maine Community College in South Portland, Maine. If you have any information about who his killer is, please call FBI Agent Andy Drewer at 207-774-9322

They are going out of their way to try to make you forget my son died, by coming up with ludicrous tales of aliens and demons. And the ONLY person with ANY motive to do that, is the blond woman who murdered my son.

NEVER FORGET!