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>I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph. Just to give you an idea of what I mean, here's what I've got in my first draft.
>I had a bit of a hard time trying to write this and, in my opinion at least, it really doesn't work. Anyone got some tips for writing this kind of passage? Just to be clear, I'm not looking for a specific critique of the paragraph itself (although feel free if it helps you illustrate your point), but for a more general guide on how to do this right.
Yes. I agree. What you have written there falls flat. Not only in words but also in presentation.
It is unnatural to read long blocks of text as dialogue.
Dialogue is short and snappy and when down properly, that little paragraph of yours should instead be many paragraphs, spanning 2 or more pages of the novel.
If a person is talking while falling asleep, their last few lines often become disjointed and they start muttering things that are inconsistent. Plus, a tired person is not going to drone on in one long monologue the way you've written it. Also, in first person, you can easily add her unspoken thoughts in between. You can also show the other party getting upset over her drifting off. Like this...
Instead of this...
"We’ll just take it one day at a time until we get to New York, and just hope that what they say is true. If not… Then something else. We’ll think of something. Just one day at a time just now. Tomorrow we’ll go swimming and that will be fun. Elsie loves swimming. We used to swim in California. Elsie used to squeal like a little girl in the water. Such a wuss…"
Write this:
"I'm worried we are doing too much, too fast."
Does she really have to bring this up now?
~YAWN~
I am so tired. Maybe if I pretend I didn't hear her...
"Hey, are you listening to me?"
"Yeah. I hear you."
"Well?"
"We’ll just take it one day at a time until we get to New York, and just hope that what they say is true. If not…"
"And?"
"What?" I jumped and looked around, wondering where I was. Her harsh reply jerked me awake. How long had I been asleep?
"Are you even listening to me?"
"Yeah. What do you want?"
"You said 'If not'..."
"If not?" I tried to recall what it was I had been saying, but sleep was clouding my mind. "If not... oh! I know. Then something else."
"Something else? What do you mean, something else?"
"We’ll think of something."
"Do you even know what you're saying?"
No. I wasn't sure what I was saying. So tired. Way past my bed time. Why won't she just leave me alone and let me sleep already. Jese, you'd think she could take a hint.
"Just one day at a time just now," I muttered feeling as if I was in a dream.
"Don't you dare give me that one more day crap, you know it's bull crap."
"Tomorrow we’ll go swimming..."
"What? Are you even listening to me?"
"That'll be fun. Hmmmm. Swimming. I like swimming."
"What are you on about?"
"Elsie loves swimming too."
"Who's talking about Elsie. I was talking about us. Wake up you stupid dolt. You don't even know what you're saying."
"We used to swim... swim... in Califooooornia. He he."
"You're dreaming, you stupid 'git. You never lived in California."
"California..."
"Wake up!"
"Elsie used to squeal like a little girl in the water. Such a wuss…"
Can you see the change in flow, from one bunched up pile of text in a single paragraph, to a long fluid flow of dialogue spanning multiple pages?
Also...
THIS:
It was a stressful night and she was lying awake worrying. Focusing on Elsie calms her down and allows her to fall asleep, and I'm keeping it flowing like this to show that she doesn't even really realise she's calmed down. It shows how worry for Elsie hurts her (keeping her awake), but that her love for Elsie is what calms her down. Basically the nature and strength of the relationship.
Is 3rd person narrative, not 1st person.
First person is this:
It was a such stressful night and here I am just lying awake worrying. Focusing on Elsie usually calms me down and allows me to fall asleep. Damn, why doesn't it work tonight? My worry for that bitch Elsie hurts me keeping me awake, but my love for Elsie calms me down. Elsie. I can't lover her. I can't hate her. Damn it all! Basically the nature and strength of the relationship. Yeah, that's what Elsie is.
On that note, let's rewrite the dialogue into 3rd person, so you can see the difference.
"I'm worried we are doing too much, too fast," Sally said.
Does she really have to bring this up now? Betsy thought, yawing. I am so tired. Maybe if I pretend I didn't hear her...
"Hey, are you listening to me?"
"Yeah. I hear you."
"Well?"
"We’ll just take it one day at a time until we get to New York, and just hope that what they say is true. If not…"
"And?" She was getting upset over Betsy's not staying alert during such an important conversation.
"What?" Betsy jumped and looked around, wondering where she was. Sally's harsh reply jerked Betsy awake. How long have I been asleep?
"Are you even listening to me?"
Sally stamped her foot and crossed her arms, but Betsy didn't notice.
"Yeah," Betsy answered sleepily. "What do you want?"
Sally rolled her eyes hoping Betsy would take a hint, but Betsy had her eyes closed and didn't see Sally's over exaggerated fake frustration.
"You said 'If not'..." Sally whined.
"If not?" Betsy tried to recall what it was she had been saying, but sleep was clouding her mind. "If not... oh! I know. Then something else."
"Something else? What do you mean, something else?"
"We’ll think of something."
"Do you even know what you're saying?"
No. Betsy thought. I wasn't sure what I was saying. So tired. Way past my bed time. Why won't she just leave me alone and let me sleep already. Jese, you'd think she could take a hint.
"Just one day at a time just now," Betsy muttered feeling as if she was in a dream.
"Don't you dare give me that one more day crap, you know it's bull crap."
"Tomorrow we’ll go swimming..."
"What? Are you even listening to me?"
Sally was getting more and more pissed off at Betsy, but Betsy was too tired to notice.
"That'll be fun. Hmmmm. Swimming. I like swimming."
"What are you on about?" It was becoming all Sally could do to not punch Betsy right now.
"Elsie loves swimming too."
"Who's talking about Elsie. I was talking about us. Wake up you stupid dolt. You don't even know what you're saying."
"We used to swim... swim... in Califooooornia. He he."
"You're dreaming, you stupid 'git. You never lived in California."
"California..."
"Wake up!"
"Elsie used to squeal like a little girl in the water. Such a wuss…"
As you can see there is very little difference. Is and MEs become proper names, hes, and shes, and you get to add extra lines to further describe what the characters are doing.
Soooo.... this page has not been updated in many, many years, nor have I shared a link to it anywhere, however, for some reason today it got 115 (one hundred and fifteen) views. Uhm... okay. That's actually a good thing, and usually that only happens to a "dead" page when someone shares it on social media, so, thank you to whomever shared it.
But anyways, while I was noticing it was getting traffic again, I decided why not let's ask ChatGPT to write it's own version of an answer, like I've been doing on my new/current pages, so, let's do that!
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Describing the act of falling asleep in creative writing can be a beautiful and evocative experience, as it allows you to convey the transition from wakefulness to slumber in a way that engages the reader's senses and emotions. Here's a step-by-step guide on how to do it effectively:
1. Set the Scene:
Begin by setting the scene and creating a sense of place. Describe the surroundings, whether it's a cozy bedroom, a moonlit forest, or a starry night on a magical ferris wheel. Use sensory details to immerse your readers in the environment.
2. Emphasize Comfort:
Highlight the comfort and coziness of the sleeping space. Mention soft blankets, plush pillows, or the gentle rustling of leaves in the breeze. Convey a feeling of safety and relaxation.
3. Sensory Details:
Engage the senses. Describe the scent of lavender from a nearby sachet, the feel of cool sheets against the skin, the muffled sounds of a distant lullaby, or the taste of warm, soothing tea before bedtime.
4. Internal Thoughts and Emotions:
Offer insight into the character's thoughts and emotions as they prepare to sleep. Are they feeling content, anxious, or reflective? Share their internal monologue or contemplations about the day.
5. Physical Sensations:
Explore the physical sensations of drowsiness. Mention the heaviness of eyelids, the gentle slowing of breath, or the way muscles relax. Connect these sensations to the character's emotional state.
6. Dreamlike Imagery:
Transition into dreamlike imagery as the character drifts off. Use metaphors and similes to describe the feeling of falling into slumber. For example, "She felt like a leaf floating on a tranquil stream," or "His thoughts scattered like stardust in the night."
7. Symbolism:
Consider incorporating symbolism or foreshadowing into the description of falling asleep. This can hint at future events or themes in your story.
8. Transition:
Signal the transition from wakefulness to sleep with a key moment or phrase. This could be the closing of the character's eyes, the last coherent thought before drifting away, or the arrival of a recurring dream.
9. Final Emotion:
Conclude with the emotional state of the character as they fall asleep. Are they finding peace, escaping from their worries, or embracing a sense of wonder? This final emotional note can leave a lasting impression on the reader.
10. Leave Room for Interpretation:
Remember that the act of falling asleep can be deeply personal and subjective. Leave room for readers to connect with the experience on their own terms, allowing them to recall their own moments of drifting into slumber.
Here's an example of describing falling asleep:
She lay in her hammock, swaying gently under the canopy of stars. The night air was cool against her skin, carrying the scent of blooming jasmine. As her eyelids grew heavy, she watched as the stars blinked like distant fireflies, their light fading into the velvety sky. She felt like a paper boat drifting on a tranquil river, carried away by the gentle current of sleep. Her last coherent thought was a whispered wish for sweet dreams, and then the world dissolved into the soft embrace of night.
Remember that the style of your description can vary based on the tone and genre of your story. Whether you're aiming for a poetic, introspective, or whimsical depiction, make sure it aligns with the overall mood and themes of your narrative.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph. Just to give you an idea of what I mean, here's what I've got in my first draft.
"It was a stressful night and she was lying awake worrying. Focusing on Elsie calms her down and allows her to fall asleep, and I'm keeping it flowing like this to show that she doesn't even really realise she's calmed down. It shows how worry for Elsie hurts her (keeping her awake), but that her love for Elsie is what calms her down. Basically the nature and strength of the relationship."
I had a bit of a hard time trying to write this and, in my opinion at least, it really doesn't work. Anyone got some tips for writing this kind of passage? Just to be clear, I'm not looking for a specific critique of the paragraph itself (although feel free if it helps you illustrate your point), but for a more general guide on how to do this right.
Please recommend edits and changes I can make to improve this.
ChatGPT's answer:
Describing the act of falling asleep through a character's thoughts and emotions can be a powerful way to convey their mental and emotional state. Here are some tips and edits you can consider to improve your passage:
Original Passage:
"It was a stressful night, and she was lying awake worrying. Focusing on Elsie calms her down and allows her to fall asleep, and I'm keeping it flowing like this to show that she doesn't even really realize she's calmed down. It shows how worry for Elsie hurts her (keeping her awake), but that her love for Elsie is what calms her down. Basically, the nature and strength of the relationship."
Revised Passage:
"On this particularly stressful night, she lay there, her thoughts swirling in the darkness like restless ghosts. Worries danced on the edges of her mind, refusing to let her find solace in slumber. It was Elsie, her anchor amidst the tumultuous sea of anxieties, who ultimately whispered peace into her troubled heart. She didn't even notice the transition, how the storm of her thoughts gradually subsided into a gentle breeze. It was as though Elsie's name alone had the power to lull her into serenity. The weight of her love for Elsie became a soothing balm, mending the frayed edges of her restless soul. She drifted into dreams, cocooned in the warm embrace of their relationship, where worries held no dominion."
Tips for Improving the Description:
1. Use Vivid Imagery: Paint a picture with words by describing the thoughts as "swirling in the darkness" and worries "dancing on the edges of her mind." This creates a visual and emotional impact.
2. Show, Don't Tell: Instead of directly stating that focusing on Elsie calms her down, show this transformation through the calming imagery and emotions that follow.
3. Embrace Metaphors: Metaphors can be a powerful tool to convey complex emotions. In this case, you can use the metaphor of a storm gradually subsiding into a gentle breeze to represent the calming effect of Elsie's presence.
4. Highlight Contrast: Emphasize the contrast between the initial restlessness and the eventual serenity. This highlights the impact of Elsie's presence on the character's mental state.
5. Bring in the Senses: Incorporate sensory details to immerse the reader in the experience. Mention the "warm embrace" and "soothing balm" to evoke a tactile and emotional response.
6. Symbolism: You can use the act of falling asleep as a symbolic representation of finding peace and comfort within their relationship. This adds depth to the narrative.
Remember, the key is to engage the reader's senses and emotions, allowing them to connect with the character's experience of falling asleep on a deeper level.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best use Vivid Imagery to do this? Can you please explain this technique in more detail? Paint a picture with words by describing the thoughts as "swirling in the darkness" and worries "dancing on the edges of her mind." This creates a visual and emotional impact. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use vivid imagery to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Using vivid imagery to describe falling asleep in creative writing can immerse readers in the character's experience. Here's a short scene as an example:
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The room was cloaked in the quiet of midnight, a tranquil canvas for the mind to paint its dreams. She lay there, her eyelids heavy with the weight of the day, each blink a slow descent into the realm of slumber. Thoughts, like fireflies in the twilight, flickered and waned, their once-keen edges softening into indistinct shadows.
Outside, the wind whispered secrets through the open window, and the curtains rustled like memories brushing against the glass. It was as if the night itself had reached out to cradle her in its tender embrace. The world beyond her senses grew distant, replaced by the ethereal landscape of her dreams.
Beneath the quilt, her body sank into the mattress, its warmth cocooning her as she journeyed deeper into the enigmatic labyrinth of sleep. Her breaths slowed, becoming gentle breezes that stirred the tranquil waters of her mind. It was as though the room had become a sanctuary, a sacred space where time flowed like a meandering river, winding its way into the realm of dreams.
The distant echo of a lullaby whispered in her thoughts, a melody of serenity that guided her into the embrace of Morpheus. The worries that had once held her captive now dissipated like mist in the morning sun, vanishing into the tapestry of her subconscious.
And there, in the hushed stillness of the night, she surrendered to the tender clasp of sleep, her consciousness becoming a ship adrift on the tranquil sea of dreams, carried away by the gentle currents of the night.
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In this example, vivid imagery is used to convey the sensory and emotional experience of falling asleep. It creates a visual and emotional impact by describing the surroundings, sensations, and mental state of the character as they transition from wakefulness to slumber.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best use Show, Don't Tell to do this? Can you please explain this technique in more detail? Instead of directly stating that focusing on Elsie calms her down, show this transformation through the calming imagery and emotions that follow. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use Show, Don't Tell to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Using "Show, Don't Tell" is a powerful technique to describe falling asleep by allowing readers to infer the character's state through actions, emotions, and sensory details. Here's a short scene as an example:
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The night stretched endlessly before her, a dark tapestry woven with threads of worry. As she lay there, restlessness gnawing at her thoughts, she reached out for Elsie. The soft warmth of her beloved's hand, intertwined with her own, sent ripples of comfort through her soul. In that simple touch, she found solace, a lifeline to tranquility.
Outside, the rain tapped gently on the windowpane, a soothing lullaby that spoke of nature's rhythms. With each drop, the weight of her concerns began to lift, carried away on the whispered cadence of the storm. Shadows played on the walls, their dance a gentle distraction from the troubles that had plagued her just moments before.
Elsie's breathing, steady and serene, mirrored the quietude of the room. It was a melody that invited her to join in, to let go of the world's troubles, if only for a while. The scent of lavender from their shared pillow wafted through the air, a fragrant promise of serenity.
She closed her eyes, embracing the sensation of sinking into the mattress, the softness cradling her like a mother's embrace. The room, once a battleground of thoughts, now transformed into a sanctuary of dreams. Her mind, still and peaceful, began to wander through the landscapes of slumber.
Images drifted by, as ethereal as clouds in the night sky, each one a fragment of a dream yet to be. The tension in her body eased, replaced by the gentle pull of drowsiness. It was a sensation as soft as a feather's touch, guiding her towards the realm of sleep.
And as the night held its breath, she let herself be carried away by the current of tranquility, her worries fading like distant echoes in the night.
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In this example, "Show, Don't Tell" is used to depict the character's journey from restlessness to calmness, allowing readers to infer her state of falling asleep through sensory details, emotions, and actions. This technique engages the reader's imagination and creates a more immersive experience.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best Embrace Metaphors to do this? Metaphors can be a powerful tool to convey complex emotions. In this case, you can use the metaphor of a storm gradually subsiding into a gentle breeze to represent the calming effect of Elsie's presence. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use Embrace Metaphors to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Metaphors can add depth and vividness to your descriptions. Here's a short scene using the metaphor of a storm to describe falling asleep:
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The night had been a tempest, her thoughts a relentless downpour that pelted the windows of her mind. Restless, she tossed and turned, seeking refuge from the deluge of worries. But then, as if in response to her silent plea, Elsie's hand found hers.
It was a lifeline thrown into the midst of the storm. Elsie's presence was a lightning rod, drawing away the charged anxiety that crackled in the air. Their fingers intertwined, creating a circuit that sent soothing currents through her body.
Outside, the storm still raged, but in their cocoon of warmth and affection, it began to relent. The thunderous thoughts that had echoed in her mind now retreated, becoming distant rumbles. Lightning flashes of concern faded into a gentle, persistent drizzle of reassurance.
Elsie's breath, once an erratic gale, steadied into a calm breeze. It rustled the leaves of her consciousness, brushing away the debris of unease. The room, once a battleground of racing thoughts, transformed into a peaceful meadow, dew-kissed and serene.
She closed her eyes, feeling the storm within her subside. The torrent of worries turned into a gentle, meandering stream of consciousness. It wound its way through the landscape of her mind, carrying away the remnants of tension and doubt.
And so, in the quietude of that night, the storm gave way to a tranquil dawn. She let herself drift, carried by the gentle zephyrs of Elsie's love, toward the shores of sleep.
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In this scene, the metaphor of a storm gradually subsiding into a gentle breeze is used to convey the narrator's journey from restlessness to falling asleep, with Elsie's presence serving as the calming force. Metaphors like this can evoke powerful emotions and imagery in your writing.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best Highlight Contrasts to do this? Emphasize the contrast between the initial restlessness and the eventual serenity. This highlights the impact of Elsie's presence on the character's mental state.. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use Highlighting Contrasts to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Highlighting contrasts can create a strong sense of transformation. Here's a short scene using this technique to describe falling asleep:
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The night had been a restless tempest, a symphony of worries that played on the strings of her consciousness. Tossing and turning in the bed, she had been trapped in a whirlwind of anxious thoughts.
But then, there was a shift, subtle yet profound. It was as if a soft hand had reached into the turbulence of her mind, stilling the chaotic currents. Elsie's presence, like a lighthouse cutting through the fog, began to work its magic.
The initial disarray of her thoughts, like scattered puzzle pieces, slowly began to assemble. Worries that had danced on the edges of her mind now found their seats, and the cacophony of doubts transformed into a gentle hum of reassurance.
Outside, the world seemed to follow suit. The howling winds that had echoed her restlessness now sighed with resignation, as if acknowledging defeat. The harsh drumming of rain on the windowpane morphed into a soothing lullaby, each drop a note in the melody of her dreams.
The contrast was striking. From a nightmarish maelstrom, she had been guided into the tranquil waters of slumber. Her racing thoughts had been tamed into a serene river, carrying her toward the shores of rest.
With a contented sigh, she closed her eyes, embracing the quietude that enveloped her. The contrast between chaos and calm was a testament to Elsie's profound influence. In the stillness, she surrendered to the embrace of sleep.
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In this scene, the contrast between the initial restlessness and the eventual serenity is emphasized, highlighting the impact of Elsie's presence on the character's mental state as she falls asleep. This technique can effectively convey the character's journey from turmoil to tranquility.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best Bring in the Senses to do this? Incorporate sensory details to immerse the reader in the experience. Mention the "warm embrace" and "soothing balm" to evoke a tactile and emotional response. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use Bringing in the Senses to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Incorporating the senses can create a vivid and immersive description of falling asleep. Here's a short scene using this technique:
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The night had been a relentless cascade of thoughts, each drop heavier than the last, beating against the windows of her mind. Anxiety had clenched its grip, refusing to let go.
But then, there was a shift—a subtle, imperceptible change that stirred the senses. It was as if a warm embrace enveloped her, a gentle cocoon of serenity. Elsie's presence had always held this power.
The room, once filled with the harsh, buzzing neon of her worries, now bathed in a soft, moonlit glow. The curtains swayed like a lullaby, their fabric brushing against her skin, whispering secrets of tranquility.
The scent of lavender, Elsie's favorite, wafted from the bedside table. It was a soothing balm, calming the tempest of her thoughts. Each breath inhaled carried the promise of a peaceful night's sleep.
The rain outside had transformed. What was once a cacophony of chaos now became a gentle patter on the roof, a rhythmic serenade that lulled her into a tranquil dreamland.
As she closed her eyes, the taste of contentment lingered on her lips, like the sweet aftertaste of a cherished memory. The world outside faded into the background, and she surrendered to the sensory symphony that Elsie's presence had orchestrated.
In the embrace of these sensations, she drifted away, carried on the soothing currents of slumber.
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In this scene, sensory details such as touch, sight, scent, sound, and taste are used to immerse the reader in the experience of falling asleep. These details evoke a tactile and emotional response, allowing the reader to feel the character's transition from restlessness to serenity as they drift into sleep.
The Prompt:
How to describe falling asleep in creative writing? I'm trying to imply that my narrator is falling asleep through what they say (and how they say it) in the final paragraph.
How can I best use Symbolism to do this? You can use the act of falling asleep as a symbolic representation of finding peace and comfort within their relationship. This adds depth to the narrative.. Could you write a short scene to use as an example of How to use Symbolism to describe falling asleep in creative writing?
ChatGPT's answer:
Certainly! Symbolism can add layers of meaning to your narrative. Here's a short scene using this technique:
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The night was a tempest, a whirlwind of worries and fears that had raged within her. Each thought was a gust of wind, threatening to uproot the fragile framework of her composure.
But then, as if summoned by the magic of the moment, the room transformed. The soft glow of the bedside lamp became a beacon of hope, casting a warm, golden halo on the walls. Shadows danced in a slow, hypnotic waltz, as if orchestrating a lullaby.
Elsie's presence beside her was the anchor in this storm. Her fingers, entwined with hers, felt like the sturdy roots of an ancient tree, grounding her in the midst of chaos.
As the minutes passed, the turmoil within her began to ebb, like a receding tide. The waves of anxiety grew gentler, their crashing crescendos reduced to soothing whispers.
She closed her eyes, surrendering to the symbolism of the moment. The act of falling asleep became a metaphor for something deeper—a journey into the tranquil sea of their love. With each breath, she descended further into its depths.
In the quietude of that room, she found solace, a sanctuary within their shared dreamscape. It was a symbol of the peace and comfort their relationship offered, a haven from the storms of life.
As her breathing slowed, and her heart found its steady rhythm, she knew that within the realm of their love, she could always find the serenity she sought.
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In this scene, the act of falling asleep is used as a symbol for finding peace and comfort within the narrator's relationship with Elsie. The symbolism adds depth to the narrative, conveying a deeper emotional connection between the characters as they find solace in each other's presence.
So, what do you think? Was ChatGPT's advice helpful?
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Sections written by AI has not been fact checked and may contain inaccuracies. They are included for entertainment purposes only. The goal here is to show you what AIs like ChatGPT are capable of doing and as such the AI sections are directly copy/pasted into this page without any edits, changes, or fact checking done, so that you can see what AI output looks like.
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I DO NOT write books with HUMAN characters.
The Erotica books and books with Human characters, that you are finding, are written by scammers trying to impersonate me.
There is an ongoing FBI investigation into this matter. If you find any such books, please report them to FBI Agent Andy Drewer @207–774–9322
146 Portland Ave, Old Orchard Beach, Maine, is NOT FOR SALE.
And I'm sick of real estate agents who are too incompetent to research land ownership before they show up to stick a for sale sign in my yard.
The fact of the matter is, my son was murdered in 2013, and the friends and family of the murderer think it is funny to keep ILLEGALLY listing my land for sale, because apparently their child murdering bitch friend didn't hurt me enough by crippling me with a golf club, ripping my baby out of my 8 month pregnant belly and beating his brains out on the ground with a golf club.
Also, her friends and family like to gaslight me by doxing me on ufo and alien abduction forums, while pretending to be me, and trying to make it look like I believe in ufos or aliens, even though I think people who believe in ufos are raving lunatics and people who claim to be alien abductees are crazy.
So, yeah, my son was murdered and the murder's friends and family endlessly harass me, my friends, and my family both online and offline, and I'm not happy with it at all.
There is an ongoing FBI investigation into this matter.
The FBI is looking for information into:
I'm going to repeat it because I'm tired of people showing up and making offers:
146 Portland Ave, Old Orchard Beach, Maine, is NOT FOR SALE.
How did you build your audience?
Not online, that's for sure.
aka How to sell ten million books
aka How I sold ten million books.
The Park Bench Method of Writing
(just the article)
or
The Park Bench Method of Writing
(with the list of 10k writing prompts - takes a LONG TIME to load - SEVERAL MINUTES!)
I Think UFO and Alien Believers Are Weird Here's Why...
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